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A Book of Horror and Honor.

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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is well penned and continues the story in a delightfully magical manner. I didn't know dwarves were so easily slain by simple colds. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    The murdering and killing of dwarfs is so easy to do you could just step on Dopy's towing he would die!
    LOL!
    Thanks,
    Ricky
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Ricky
your clever way of telling a tale using the fairy tale
Snow white and the the five dwarfs and a mention of the Fairy tale Hansel and Gretel spreading bred crumbs and your tale of the tale of Snow White you wrote ( finding feathers )

Gert

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    Yes,
    I will continue this.
    Thanks,
    Ricky
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Young readers will enjoy this story. The new twists to the fairy tale add another interesting dimension. Leaving readers to wonder what will occur next does too. Hang in there Snow White, help is on the way.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
    Thanks Brett.
    I'm working on a piece called...
    "How far is Heaven?"
    (based on the song)
    Ricky
    Take Care.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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So, Snow White has been taken by the Giant Red-Tail Buzzard and she's trying to pull its feathers out so it can't fly... and here, we have Prince Charming and the remaining 5 dwarves getting a sling shot to rescue her.... Wow! ;) What a twist on the old tale! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    I didn't think about her pulling the feathers out so the buzzer can't fly.
    More or less to mark the trail.
    So, that the rescuers could find her.
    This, I'll be finishing it in a little while....
    Ricky
Comment from JudyE
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That's a good idea of Snow White's to pluck the feathers from the buzzard so someone can follow her trail.

I think in the following:

"Along many winding and complicated trails, he searched for what seemed an Eternity?"
...
"And, as he traveled for two days, he finally smelled the odor of pine?"

- the question marks should be replaced by periods.

Thanks for a fun read.
Judy

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Why thanks for this Judy.
    The question marks r intentional.
    Doctor Ricky 1024?
reply by JudyE on 29-Oct-2019
    Oh sorry. Have a great day.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
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Classic fairy tell retellings, always fun. Leaving a string o f feathers behind, bright red, easy to spot. Sad to see Dopey and Grumpy go. Thanks for the story!

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Sorry about the hose two but I had to pick two
    (Just Me!)
    This will be completed soon.
    Ricky
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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"And, as he traveled for two days he finally smelled (comma after days)

"ThecPrince told the now "Five Dwarfs." (remove 'c' between the and prince. This should be asked rather than told, and the next line should end with a question mark instead of a period.

Take care, my friend~Debbie


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the heads up on my Grammar.
    Ricky
Comment from tfawcus
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An original retelling of the Snow White fairy tale. You've introduced some interesting new twists and left your young readers wondering about what might happen next.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Thanks tfawcus and have a great week.
    Ricky
Comment from robyn corum
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Ricky,

Hmmm... intriguing twists and turns to the whole story. This makes perfection sense to me-- how can one princess live happily with eight men?

Not possible! Haha

Notes, if I may:
1.) "Two of the Seven (Dwarves) have passed."

2.) "ThecPrince told the now "Five Dwarfs." [should be-]
--> "(The) Prince told the now "Five (Dwarves)."

Thanks for sharing!



 Comment Written 29-Oct-2019


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2019
    Thanks Robin for the heads up on my Grammar.
    Doctor Ricky1024
reply by robyn corum on 29-Oct-2019
    welcome!