Out Standing Stories and Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Picture a House?"A Book of Horror and Honor.
8 total reviews
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
The chill just ran through my body. I did not see that coming. Well written and totally surprising. Too late, I just thought of the movie tag line,"I See Dead People." Eerie and entertaining... ...ec
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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The chill just ran through my body. I did not see that coming. Well written and totally surprising. Too late, I just thought of the movie tag line,"I See Dead People." Eerie and entertaining... ...ec
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2019
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In order to write and write well...
In many forms...
And, do it the right way.
You need to be able to write first, from the Mind...
Then into the Heart...
And, finally...
Through and with the Soul.
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If you can accomplish that then you will be a great writer.
Thanks,
Ricky 1024
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is an interesting write as always, my friend. I must have missed the preceding stories. Best wishes with your collection, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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This is an interesting write as always, my friend. I must have missed the preceding stories. Best wishes with your collection, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thanks Debbie and take Care...
The Spooks are coming soon....
Barbara....
(Night of the Living Dead)
Ricky
Comment from sunnilicious
Omg, omg... What an ending?!!!
I grew bored waiting to be horrorified. And it was just a clencher, but it really surprised me. Good flow of events. Great storytelling. Memorable story. Excellent work.
God bless you.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Omg, omg... What an ending?!!!
I grew bored waiting to be horrorified. And it was just a clencher, but it really surprised me. Good flow of events. Great storytelling. Memorable story. Excellent work.
God bless you.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thanks and watch the sixth sense it in you getting idea where I came up with the trick endings.
Ricky
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now that one certainly has an ending that no one even suspects is coming - great job!! ;) I'm wondering if the pictures themselves are actually real...? :) :) Thanx for sharing! Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Wow -- now that one certainly has an ending that no one even suspects is coming - great job!! ;) I'm wondering if the pictures themselves are actually real...? :) :) Thanx for sharing! Yvette
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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ID for this poem actually came from watching a movie on TV where there's a scene with the woman taking pictures of houses with her daughter and then you see the daughter walk into a cornfield looking for the mother and she's taking another picture of a house.
Thanks,
Ricky
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Ricky,
this is a compelling story and was a pleasure to read. I liked the way you repeated the Picture of House theme. That was really an enjoyable read with a great twist at the end.
Well done.
Brenda.x
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Hi Ricky,
this is a compelling story and was a pleasure to read. I liked the way you repeated the Picture of House theme. That was really an enjoyable read with a great twist at the end.
Well done.
Brenda.x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Chubby Checker couldn't have done it better!
Man him about 35 years ago.
Thanks,
Ricky
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
WOW! I did not see that ending coming at all. This is very well done, my friend, as you tell a compelling story that ends with a completely surprising twist. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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WOW! I did not see that ending coming at all. This is very well done, my friend, as you tell a compelling story that ends with a completely surprising twist. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thanks.
I picked up this trick from watching a Bruce Willis movie...
"The Sixth Sense"
Ricky
Comment from Alex Rosel
I particularly like this. The sting in the tail caught me completely unaware. You've structured it well {smiles}.
"Pictures of houses...
"Pictures of empty houses...
"Pictures of empty houses where no one lived...
"Pictures of empty houses were no one lived and the people had died!" 1 I like this progression of the narrative; it's like adding layers of paint on a portrait {smiles}.
Good job!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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I particularly like this. The sting in the tail caught me completely unaware. You've structured it well {smiles}.
"Pictures of houses...
"Pictures of empty houses...
"Pictures of empty houses where no one lived...
"Pictures of empty houses were no one lived and the people had died!" 1 I like this progression of the narrative; it's like adding layers of paint on a portrait {smiles}.
Good job!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thanks and as a Hornet?
I sting the best!
Ricky
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Thumbs up.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Once I adjusted to the formatting, I found this post flowed very well and unfolded very well indeed. This passage is very good and uses the repetition to good effect - "Pictures of houses...
"Pictures of empty houses...
"Pictures of empty houses where no one lived...
"Pictures of empty houses were no one lived and the people had died!"
A year went by and Laura had felt did she had accumulated enough pictures." - maybe a little substitute word in here. had felt like she had or wondered if she had.
"For a particular but odd reason?" - not sure you need the question mark here.
Nice twist at the end.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Hi there,
Once I adjusted to the formatting, I found this post flowed very well and unfolded very well indeed. This passage is very good and uses the repetition to good effect - "Pictures of houses...
"Pictures of empty houses...
"Pictures of empty houses where no one lived...
"Pictures of empty houses were no one lived and the people had died!"
A year went by and Laura had felt did she had accumulated enough pictures." - maybe a little substitute word in here. had felt like she had or wondered if she had.
"For a particular but odd reason?" - not sure you need the question mark here.
Nice twist at the end.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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My style.
I first got the idea from watching a movie the sixth Sense I continued with a piece called around the World in 80 days.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024