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Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "St. Louis Chapter 15 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
19 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is excellent story-telling again, as you always do, but there is a tiny flaw (in my opinion):
"...and slightly lifted him..." I would be ruthless here and simply end the sentence at "...the front of Austin's T-shirt." The rest just doesn't seem believable.
Then the next sentence would change to Logan let Austin go (not "set Austin down").
A T-shirt would not hold the weight of the average man to have him dangle/ or need to be 'put down'.
Of course, it's your decision. It's an exceptional book overall, and these are minor 'tweaks' I'm suggesting. :))
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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This is excellent story-telling again, as you always do, but there is a tiny flaw (in my opinion):
"...and slightly lifted him..." I would be ruthless here and simply end the sentence at "...the front of Austin's T-shirt." The rest just doesn't seem believable.
Then the next sentence would change to Logan let Austin go (not "set Austin down").
A T-shirt would not hold the weight of the average man to have him dangle/ or need to be 'put down'.
Of course, it's your decision. It's an exceptional book overall, and these are minor 'tweaks' I'm suggesting. :))
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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I have actually seen it happen, but I changed it to make sure. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're most welcome, my friend.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
This chapter was just great. Better than most, even, and that's saying a lot. *smile* I am enjoying this relationship that's developing between these two hard headed people. It's fun and entertaining. Thanks!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Barbara,
This chapter was just great. Better than most, even, and that's saying a lot. *smile* I am enjoying this relationship that's developing between these two hard headed people. It's fun and entertaining. Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Once inside, you go up on to bed. (go on up to bed?)
Another well written segment of this chapter. I love your stories with romance and always dogs. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Once inside, you go up on to bed. (go on up to bed?)
Another well written segment of this chapter. I love your stories with romance and always dogs. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Of course at least one dog. LOL Thank you for the catch.
Comment from tfawcus
I thought this a particularly good chapter, Barbara. The drama of the shooting and McKenzie's reaction to it were both graphic and believable. It seems that she may take more notice of Logan's warnings now.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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I thought this a particularly good chapter, Barbara. The drama of the shooting and McKenzie's reaction to it were both graphic and believable. It seems that she may take more notice of Logan's warnings now.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
These two are something else. So the black SUV misses the target again and hits a friend. They'll be back in a different way. Logan needs to behave, She might just blow his ear off. LOL.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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These two are something else. So the black SUV misses the target again and hits a friend. They'll be back in a different way. Logan needs to behave, She might just blow his ear off. LOL.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
I want to apologize again for not folowing this book. My eyes are so bad that going to your portfolio and catching up is next to imposible. I am sure it is a great story.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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I want to apologize again for not folowing this book. My eyes are so bad that going to your portfolio and catching up is next to imposible. I am sure it is a great story.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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I always enjoy hearing from you no matter how often.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent chapter in your book about Logan and McKenzie. You presented the story in a believable way with a good pace to the action and the conversations. Good luck to Logan dealing with an upset and temperamental lady who is dealing with a lot in the present and her past.
Bill
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Excellent chapter in your book about Logan and McKenzie. You presented the story in a believable way with a good pace to the action and the conversations. Good luck to Logan dealing with an upset and temperamental lady who is dealing with a lot in the present and her past.
Bill
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello and a terrific Tuesday to you Barbara. Well, well, well, that was quite a chapter. I was scared there for a quick second, I thought it was going to be Logan that was shot, I'm glad that it wasn't. Mac is lucky Jose was there to protect her. Good job, can't wait for the next installment.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Hello and a terrific Tuesday to you Barbara. Well, well, well, that was quite a chapter. I was scared there for a quick second, I thought it was going to be Logan that was shot, I'm glad that it wasn't. Mac is lucky Jose was there to protect her. Good job, can't wait for the next installment.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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I always enjoy your reviews.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank your for the generous supportive review.
