Collecting Dust
Overlooked and Neglected contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is one thing that was better left neglected methinks, otherwise you may not have been here to write this beautifully rhymed poem. Well this one has to be my favourite, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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This is one thing that was better left neglected methinks, otherwise you may not have been here to write this beautifully rhymed poem. Well this one has to be my favourite, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Dolly. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from LisaMay
Obviously, reading this I was drugged into thinking you were talking about someone. I weed myself thinking of you and Maryjane bongking. ('Bonking' is a British expression for sexual intercourse.)
The woes I knew that lied ahead,.... I'm wondering about 'lied'. Intentional? The correct word would be 'lay'. (or is that just me with sex on my mind again?)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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Obviously, reading this I was drugged into thinking you were talking about someone. I weed myself thinking of you and Maryjane bongking. ('Bonking' is a British expression for sexual intercourse.)
The woes I knew that lied ahead,.... I'm wondering about 'lied'. Intentional? The correct word would be 'lay'. (or is that just me with sex on my mind again?)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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Haha. Thank you for the great review and for sponsoring the contest, Lisa. I had fun with it. When I looked up the deal with lay and lie, the web told me that there needed to be a object for 'lay.' You lay the smoking bong down for rest. Lol. Lie is a verb that means to recline or to rest. So seeing as how 'woe' isn't actually an object that one can 'lay' down, I guess it's a verb. I really don't know or care either way. Maybe some day I'll know but for right now I've been up for 22 hours straight and have a few stiff drinks coursing through my veins, so it doesn't really matter to me. Haha. Thank you again, Lisa. Have a great day...or night, whatever it is there right now. Lol.
Comment from humpwhistle
Never before have I been moved to tears by a lonely bong.
But I see it now. How I turned my back. How I spurned my one cherished friend. The layers of dust. The mildewed water bulb.
Oh, how could I have been so cruel?
I'm a monster. I . . . I can't go on.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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Never before have I been moved to tears by a lonely bong.
But I see it now. How I turned my back. How I spurned my one cherished friend. The layers of dust. The mildewed water bulb.
Oh, how could I have been so cruel?
I'm a monster. I . . . I can't go on.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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HAHAHA. I know...right? Thank you for the hilarious review and chuckle, Lee. Made my day. I appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Have a great weekend.
Comment from RodG
I like how you set the scene and characterize this object as an old friend now literally sitting on a shelf. We get a vivid picture of the narrator as a younger man before he got his act together. Rod
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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I like how you set the scene and characterize this object as an old friend now literally sitting on a shelf. We get a vivid picture of the narrator as a younger man before he got his act together. Rod
Comment Written 19-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Rod. I really appreciate it. Have a great weekend.
