Night's end
Horror in three sentences contest entry34 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very good and spooky. Abraham Lincoln said of a long-winded senator, "That man can compress fewer thoughts into more words than any other man I know." Not so here.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Very good and spooky. Abraham Lincoln said of a long-winded senator, "That man can compress fewer thoughts into more words than any other man I know." Not so here.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the awesome review and especially the Abe info.
God bless
Comment from Susan Larson
The horror to me can go two ways. Does the narrator think he is about to be attacked and horrifies his attacker? Or is the narrator a psychopath, seeking a victim? Why is he walking around with a machete? I like the mystery of it.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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The horror to me can go two ways. Does the narrator think he is about to be attacked and horrifies his attacker? Or is the narrator a psychopath, seeking a victim? Why is he walking around with a machete? I like the mystery of it.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Susan. I enjoy such reviews as I find others' viewpoints interesting. In my mind, this guy is evil and was looking for his first kill.
God bless
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Makes more sense than walking around with an emergency machete, but in a back alley, you never know what horror you might encounter.
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Right!
Comment from Lobber
Hello,
A difficult writing challenge.. .somehow I feel I came in the middle of the story and missed the beginning and the end. Empathy? There's intoxicating desire but not much gore or horror. Did the pumpkin survive? - Lobber
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Hello,
A difficult writing challenge.. .somehow I feel I came in the middle of the story and missed the beginning and the end. Empathy? There's intoxicating desire but not much gore or horror. Did the pumpkin survive? - Lobber
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Lobber. This was definitely a challenge, but fun.
God bless
Comment from Dionisios
This is great! It's terrifying how much you packed in in just 3 sentences and it tells a story. The poor victim. He must have had his headphones on and tweeting while walking in the dark. Probably didn't even notice his head getting cut off! Thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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This is great! It's terrifying how much you packed in in just 3 sentences and it tells a story. The poor victim. He must have had his headphones on and tweeting while walking in the dark. Probably didn't even notice his head getting cut off! Thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review my, friend. The guy was definitely caught off guard.
God bless
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. You did a great job of getting a lot of gory details into a mere three sentence story. That is a commendable job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Hello mystery writer. You did a great job of getting a lot of gory details into a mere three sentence story. That is a commendable job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Much appreciated, Robert.
God bless
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You're welcome
Comment from Raul1
I think that this story has a chance of winning the contest! This story is sure creepy and kept crawling up a wall. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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I think that this story has a chance of winning the contest! This story is sure creepy and kept crawling up a wall. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Raul, for this excellent and encouraging review.
God bless
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You're welcome.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is truly a horror story, but as the reader, I wonder about motivation. Perhaps you left it deliberately for us to come up with...
In any case, your tale is convincing, and conforms to all the requirements of the contest.
In the first sentence I would use unsuspecting, rather than unexpecting.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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This is truly a horror story, but as the reader, I wonder about motivation. Perhaps you left it deliberately for us to come up with...
In any case, your tale is convincing, and conforms to all the requirements of the contest.
In the first sentence I would use unsuspecting, rather than unexpecting.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Katherine, for the great review. I enjoyed the restrictions this one presented as I'm looking to hone my craft in shorts.
God bless
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
There's a story brewing here...a horror story. It's difficult to write something that's a story in three sentences. But you did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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There's a story brewing here...a horror story. It's difficult to write something that's a story in three sentences. But you did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Rosemary, for the awesome review.
God bless
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
This certainly creeped me out and it takes a lot to do that. Good one! A competitive response to the challenge! Good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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This certainly creeped me out and it takes a lot to do that. Good one! A competitive response to the challenge! Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Awesome review! Thank you. I enjoy the creep factor myself.
God bless
Comment from Mia Twysted
Something a serial killer would say. I love that I felt that I was right there with the man as he chopped that body into pieces. You told an amazing story in such a short amount of sentences. Very well done.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Something a serial killer would say. I love that I felt that I was right there with the man as he chopped that body into pieces. You told an amazing story in such a short amount of sentences. Very well done.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Thank you, I love your pseudonym and the spelling of Twysted.
God bless
