Midnight Pursuit
No, it really wasn't safe after all...9 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
You managed to comply with the contest rules and convey a sense of relief followed by the reality of horror. Classic tableau for horror fiction.
The title adds to the tension.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
  |
You managed to comply with the contest rules and convey a sense of relief followed by the reality of horror. Classic tableau for horror fiction.
The title adds to the tension.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
-
Thank you for those encouraging comments!!
-
The automatic door lock was a great touch.
JJ
-
Thank you!! ;)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, without even mentioning what it is you have filled my mind with the horror of the unknown, the putrid monster who was now in the room! A horror in wait, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
|
Oh my goodness, without even mentioning what it is you have filled my mind with the horror of the unknown, the putrid monster who was now in the room! A horror in wait, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
-
LOL! Glad they worked.... three sentences is just not much to go on! Thank you for your review!
Comment from Dionisios
Great world building. I was trapped in the small space mangy pursuers in there with her. I was hoping for some action just as she closed the door, the banging of the creatures beyond, just to up the fear level. But You've got me interested in wanting to read and know more about what's happening. What's chasing her? Does she live or die? Thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
Great world building. I was trapped in the small space mangy pursuers in there with her. I was hoping for some action just as she closed the door, the banging of the creatures beyond, just to up the fear level. But You've got me interested in wanting to read and know more about what's happening. What's chasing her? Does she live or die? Thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
So glad you're interested, Dionisios, but the contest only allowed me these three sentences... sorry! But I am glad I was able to whet your appetite for more - those sentences must have done their job... Thank you so very much for your wonderful review!!
Comment from Barbaraj1
A good horror story. A little different than others I read; this has
dogs involved. I like the way she heard the growl and smelled the
putrid breath. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
A good horror story. A little different than others I read; this has
dogs involved. I like the way she heard the growl and smelled the
putrid breath. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
Thank you so much for your encouraging review, Barbara - so appreciated!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, I was worried about you. *smile* That first sentence rolled and rolled along and the paragraph was coming to an end... I was afraid you wouldn't even get the second sentence in, much less the third. hahaha
I shouldn't have doubted you. You had it all under control.
I have never seen a contest like this - I like it! It's a daring thing to attempt, but I think you pulled it off. I don't think I would like being in whatever small space that was...
Nicely done --Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, I was worried about you. *smile* That first sentence rolled and rolled along and the paragraph was coming to an end... I was afraid you wouldn't even get the second sentence in, much less the third. hahaha
I shouldn't have doubted you. You had it all under control.
I have never seen a contest like this - I like it! It's a daring thing to attempt, but I think you pulled it off. I don't think I would like being in whatever small space that was...
Nicely done --Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
Worry not...lol! Thank you so much for your encouraging review, Robyn - so appreciated!
Comment from moongirlwriter
Ohhhhh this takes me back to my childhood looking down the end of a dark hallway. I still hate that feeling. It's a curiosity to me how some people feel empowered by something very evil like this and others, like me are faint of heart. Some things never change. :) Well written and frightening to me. . .a true horror story.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
Ohhhhh this takes me back to my childhood looking down the end of a dark hallway. I still hate that feeling. It's a curiosity to me how some people feel empowered by something very evil like this and others, like me are faint of heart. Some things never change. :) Well written and frightening to me. . .a true horror story.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
Thank you for your encouraging review - much appreciated!
-
:)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The horror of trying to escape and running into the middle of the fear is not hard to contemplate. The succinctness of that horror is in your composition. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
The horror of trying to escape and running into the middle of the fear is not hard to contemplate. The succinctness of that horror is in your composition. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
Thank you for your encouraging review, Raffaelina - much appreciated!
Comment from RodG
You convey fear and terror in three short sentences. Quickly you set the scene of a girl trying to elude a pack of animals by getting inside quickly. She does not succeed and chills go up and down our spines. I especially like the graphic description of the growl and putrid breath. Rod
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
You convey fear and terror in three short sentences. Quickly you set the scene of a girl trying to elude a pack of animals by getting inside quickly. She does not succeed and chills go up and down our spines. I especially like the graphic description of the growl and putrid breath. Rod
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
Thank you for your encouraging review, Rod - much appreciated!
Comment from Raul1
I think that this story has a chance of winning the contest! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like how you wrote this story. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
|
I think that this story has a chance of winning the contest! Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like how you wrote this story. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
-
Thank you for your review.
-
You're welcome.