Tommy
...he has been gone for hours8 total reviews
Comment from papa55mike
What a great entry into this contest. This story is very well-written and I love the picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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What a great entry into this contest. This story is very well-written and I love the picture.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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awe! Thanks so much! This is a new genre for me, so i greatly appreciate the feedback! xoxo
Comment from Debbie Pope
Just horrible. I don't know why I am reading the entries in this contest. They are creeping me out for sure. Yours is one of the worst. Tommy sounds like such a good kid, doing manual labor on his parent's farm. He deserved better than your ending.
Obviously, you have told a complete story, and it is definitely horrible. Good job and good luck in this awful contest. This is a good entry.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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Just horrible. I don't know why I am reading the entries in this contest. They are creeping me out for sure. Yours is one of the worst. Tommy sounds like such a good kid, doing manual labor on his parent's farm. He deserved better than your ending.
Obviously, you have told a complete story, and it is definitely horrible. Good job and good luck in this awful contest. This is a good entry.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2019
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lol! thank God it's fiction! i appreciate though that you took time to read and found it met the contest requirements even if it was a little unnerving. xoxo
Comment from LisaMay
I'm sorry, but I am never going to 'enjoy' horror. Your 3 sentences are well constructed and definitely deliver a horrifying situation, but how distressing this would be for anyone to read who has been confronted by a loved one's death by murder or suicide.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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I'm sorry, but I am never going to 'enjoy' horror. Your 3 sentences are well constructed and definitely deliver a horrifying situation, but how distressing this would be for anyone to read who has been confronted by a loved one's death by murder or suicide.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Yikes! thankfully this is fiction, and I hope no one would ever find their loved one as described here. :( Thank you though for your review. No one puts a notice of how gory it can be or not. I certainly do not mean to offend anyone, least of all you, my friend.
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I know that no offense is intended - I am just squeamish. xx
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness! Did Tommy have some enemies or was it the ghouls on Halloween who committed this horrific murder? I guess we will never know, but this is a chilling scene, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Oh my goodness! Did Tommy have some enemies or was it the ghouls on Halloween who committed this horrific murder? I guess we will never know, but this is a chilling scene, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Hmm...a good question! I think that has yet to be determined! :) thanks for stopping to read! xoxo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, my.....that's quite dreadful and gory! You should probably put a warning on this one for violence.... Also, in your second sentence the first portion set off in commas [After being gone for many hours and no sign of his return] does not match the noun that it should be modifying [Tommy's family]. Good luck at the polls... :) ;)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Oh, my.....that's quite dreadful and gory! You should probably put a warning on this one for violence.... Also, in your second sentence the first portion set off in commas [After being gone for many hours and no sign of his return] does not match the noun that it should be modifying [Tommy's family]. Good luck at the polls... :) ;)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thanks! Got it! I?ll review again! Appreciate your awesome feedback!
Comment from Raul1
This is frightening and spooky. I think your story has a chance of winning the contest! No mistakes found in this story. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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This is frightening and spooky. I think your story has a chance of winning the contest! No mistakes found in this story. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your comment!! xoxo
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You're welcome.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This story certainly is horrific. It meets the contest requirements in terms of subject matter and length. The picture complements it nicely. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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This story certainly is horrific. It meets the contest requirements in terms of subject matter and length. The picture complements it nicely. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Thank you for taking time to read and offer your feedback! xoxo
Comment from Susan Larson
Gross! I'm new to this format of three sentences of horror. If the point is to create a scene and feeling of horror, you have accomplished your objective.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Gross! I'm new to this format of three sentences of horror. If the point is to create a scene and feeling of horror, you have accomplished your objective.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2019
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Ha! Love your response! Definitely gross! Thanks so much for taking time to read! xoxo