Time Stood Still
Second-hand information in 50 words.11 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
this is an intriguing piece of prose dear anonymous! I love the concept and the execution. bravo my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a huge hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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this is an intriguing piece of prose dear anonymous! I love the concept and the execution. bravo my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a huge hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thanks so much for your high rating. I wish more voters thought like you! I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is VERY creatively-written and amusing. There are so many plays on words for such a short piece. Personifying the watch by having it narrate--clever touch!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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This piece is VERY creatively-written and amusing. There are so many plays on words for such a short piece. Personifying the watch by having it narrate--clever touch!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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Nice review, thank you.
Comment from Rikki66
Good luck in the contest. For that poor watch, time is a stop. **********************************************************************************************************************************************************lxvi
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Good luck in the contest. For that poor watch, time is a stop. **********************************************************************************************************************************************************lxvi
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Yep, it's definitely busted. Thanks for visiting my story.
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Welcome.
Rikki
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Is this a clock that has lost its spring? The glass is definitely broken in several pieces. It reminds me of a candle that I had ordered once. It came the same way. Sure was no fixed to it.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Is this a clock that has lost its spring? The glass is definitely broken in several pieces. It reminds me of a candle that I had ordered once. It came the same way. Sure was no fixed to it.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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It's a busted watch. Thanks for checking out my little story.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the urgency that is in this piece. Don't touch me or you could get hurt that is what I take away from this.
Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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I love the urgency that is in this piece. Don't touch me or you could get hurt that is what I take away from this.
Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2019
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It's interesting the different interpretations that are possible when people write something. It's just a broken watch, but the sharp pieces could hurt someone.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever play on words and I enjoyed this jaunt through time as it stood still in the moment, my father built a grandfather clock and when he died it stopped and never worked again, this is a true story, your words were much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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This is a clever play on words and I enjoyed this jaunt through time as it stood still in the moment, my father built a grandfather clock and when he died it stopped and never worked again, this is a true story, your words were much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
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Was your grandfather the inspiration for that old song?...
My grandfather's clock was too large for the shelf
So it stood ninety years on the floor
It was taller by half than the old man himself
Though it weighed not a pennyweight more
It was bought on the morn of the day that he was born
And was always his treasure and pride
But it stopped, short never to go again
When the old man died
Ninety years without slumbering
His life seconds numbering
It stopped, short never to go again
When the old man died
etc.
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I loved this rhyming story and I have not heard it before but it sounds like it fits perfectly for my father! Thank you for sending it to me, love Dolly x
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The rhyme is a lot longer. If you put the first few lines into google the lyrics will come up and you can see the poem in its entirety.
Comment from juliaSjames
POV of a broken watch but the feelings could apply to us as human beings. This is a neat write, my mystery friend. I wish the title could literally be true at times. Tick Tock. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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POV of a broken watch but the feelings could apply to us as human beings. This is a neat write, my mystery friend. I wish the title could literally be true at times. Tick Tock. Good Luck!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Actually, winding the clock back is an even more appealing thought!
Thanks for your review.
Comment from beizanten
An attention capturing title, you easily capture my interest. Very short and simple yet very well written and happening. Is 'I' in this poem a clock? I am very interested
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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An attention capturing title, you easily capture my interest. Very short and simple yet very well written and happening. Is 'I' in this poem a clock? I am very interested
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Yes, you worked it out... I wrote it pretending I was a watch, but a clock is close enough too.
Thanks for reviewing my story.
Comment from Patricia1
This is really good! Great way to describe the broken watch and what it might say! The pic added to the visual! Love that second paragraph! "There's no spring left in my step"and "don't tick me off or wind me up..."
Very creative!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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This is really good! Great way to describe the broken watch and what it might say! The pic added to the visual! Love that second paragraph! "There's no spring left in my step"and "don't tick me off or wind me up..."
Very creative!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your review and your nice comments about my story.
Comment from royowen
Some great personification here, the object is a very good one, and one of those posts, where you have few words to describe perfectly, but I think you've done a good job, and a great entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Some great personification here, the object is a very good one, and one of those posts, where you have few words to describe perfectly, but I think you've done a good job, and a great entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thanks Roy.
