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the corner shop

a 50 word dribble fiction

5 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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so good. I like the idea of your poem because it expresses the weary, sadness which had just happened. Many times you read about things like this happening in real life.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    I cannot imagine the grief of losing someone to senseless violence. I was trying to expose a glimpse of grief. Cheers.
Comment from juliaSjames
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Your 50 words are carefully used to tell this story of fortitude in the face of tragedy. It's possible to picture the grieving widow doing her best to eke out a living. And to wonder at the callous behaviour of the murderous robbers.

Well done, mystery writer.
Good luck.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the thoughtful review Julia. I just wanted to expose a glimpse of grief. I can not imagine the senseless pain to lose a loved one to violence. Cheers.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Wow -- now that says a whole lot in those 50 words... the reader just need let their heart and mind fill in the details! ;) :) Great offering for the contest -- good luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the review. I just wanted a glimpse of grief in 50 words. I cannot imagine the pain of losing someone I love to senseless violence. Cheers.
Comment from Miranda Langston
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this is certainly an emotional, (heck, it's heartwrenching) sweet, and well-written dribble flash fiction. best of luck to you in the contest, my friend, and keep up the amazing work

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
    Thanks for the review Miranda. In 50 words, I wanted to expose a glimpse of grief. Cheers.
Comment from Bill Pinder
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thanks for sharing this story about a murder in the corner shop. It's terrible when someone has to see a reminder of an event like that every day afterward.
Bill

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
    Exactly, I cannot imagine the pain of losing someone I love to senseless violence. And yes, that reminder would just make it worst. Cheers.