Hell-phone
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Comment from Susan X Smith
Oops! He didn't make it to the luxury condos upstairs, but took a wrong turn and went down hill instead. This is a cute story and an excellent entry for the writing prompt.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Oops! He didn't make it to the luxury condos upstairs, but took a wrong turn and went down hill instead. This is a cute story and an excellent entry for the writing prompt.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2019
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Thank you
Comment from NickieT
I really appreciate the cleverness of this entry. The word play and satyr make this a rewarding and fun read. The idea of reception and texting and technology in general in the afterlife is an interesting take.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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I really appreciate the cleverness of this entry. The word play and satyr make this a rewarding and fun read. The idea of reception and texting and technology in general in the afterlife is an interesting take.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind and funny review.
Comment from Susan Larson
Funny little dialogue and I think it was a good idea to include the lines. It does help showcase the dialogue. I see no typos or anything I would change. I'd say stick with Flash Fiction. You are good at it!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Funny little dialogue and I think it was a good idea to include the lines. It does help showcase the dialogue. I see no typos or anything I would change. I'd say stick with Flash Fiction. You are good at it!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much🥰 I really appreciate your feedback and I think you are right the flash fiction could be my thing.
Comment from shaffer40
A story in fifty words is not easy, and this is a clever response to the response. I like the emphasis the lines create, especially on the last line, or punchline, I should say.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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A story in fifty words is not easy, and this is a clever response to the response. I like the emphasis the lines create, especially on the last line, or punchline, I should say.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Gail Denham
One doubts if God cares that much about cell service. In an emergency certainly one cries out for help. Cute fun little story. For us, it would be "please warm us up" - down to 13 this morning.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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One doubts if God cares that much about cell service. In an emergency certainly one cries out for help. Cute fun little story. For us, it would be "please warm us up" - down to 13 this morning.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you:)
Comment from Sally Law
This is fun. Yes, God is good and His lines are never crossed. Although I think we give Him too little credit and praise for being so loving and good.
Sending you my best today and my best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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This is fun. Yes, God is good and His lines are never crossed. Although I think we give Him too little credit and praise for being so loving and good.
Sending you my best today and my best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally xo
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you:)
Comment from rjuselius
haha. lol. this is an entertaining piece of prose dear anonymous! I guess it takes a long time to freeze hell over.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a huge hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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haha. lol. this is an entertaining piece of prose dear anonymous! I guess it takes a long time to freeze hell over.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a huge hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your fun review.
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with the story and the word play in your title of "hell phone" which gives us the context of where the caller is calling from. Also good use "666" for those who know the reference to the Book of Revelation.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Great job with the story and the word play in your title of "hell phone" which gives us the context of where the caller is calling from. Also good use "666" for those who know the reference to the Book of Revelation.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, I really appreciate your insight on this story.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Everything about this entry is well done, including those lines separating dialogue. They actually help. It's hard to do dialogue in dribble fiction because identifiers take too many valuable words. Your dialogue is sharp and comes through crystal clear.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Everything about this entry is well done, including those lines separating dialogue. They actually help. It's hard to do dialogue in dribble fiction because identifiers take too many valuable words. Your dialogue is sharp and comes through crystal clear.
Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your insight
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The phone call no one wants to make. This is very clever. I love clever writing. It shows a good mind at work. Your poem is an excellent contest entry and the picture perfectly illustrates it.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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The phone call no one wants to make. This is very clever. I love clever writing. It shows a good mind at work. Your poem is an excellent contest entry and the picture perfectly illustrates it.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
