Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

I think I've missed a few previous installments of this. I've tried to catch them when I can. They have quite a menagerie of young dragons with different personalities. I like the way it's developing and look forward to reading more of this intriguing and well written saga. Great job and well done!

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2019

Thanks. I hope you will stay tuned for more. The previous chapters are available in my portfolio if you want to read them, but you don't have to bother reviewing that old stuff for one point.

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello and a terrific Thursday to you Cindy. Though I have to admit, that these types of fantasy stories aren't my thing, your story kept me engaged from beginning to end. I look forward to reading more. Good job!

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019

Thanks. This is a new kind of story for me, too. I'm a little out of my comfort zone with it. It's based on a dream I had a couple of weeks ago and I thought it would make a good story. Glad you're enjoying it.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Cindy. Another very well composed chapter to your story. Interesting and a new genre for me. I think I read one chapter prior to the two I read tonight. Keep on going. Marilyn

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2019

Thanks. It's a new genre for me, too. A little out of my comfort zone. It's based on a dream I had a couple of weeks ago and I thought it would make a good story.

reply by BeasPeas on 11-Oct-2019

Yes, it is a good story. Amazing that we get many of our themes from dreams. I do, too. Marilyn

Comment from Melonie Kirchoff

Excellent

Great chapter about dragons hatching and the way they relate to each other and the humans. The only part I would change is when it says that Aaron is a story teller but he only said a few things. Him talking could go on much longer. Great work!

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019

Thanks. I think Aaron's storytelling could be important later, but for now I have to be careful not to let it get repetitious or too far off topic.

Comment from Nowhereman1

Excellent

Thank you for posting this chapter. It has been a fun ride to see what the dragons are up to. This was another well written part of the story. I am really enjoying it

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

Thanks. It's been a fun write, too. I'm so glad you're enjoying it.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I have a feeling the peaceful afternoon will NOT last. Hope Aaron isn't too rusty with his weapons. Seems the witch wants to help, so she's not the danger. Must be a new character coming. :)

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

Thanks. You're right. This lady is not warm and fuzzy and you wouldn't want to piss her off, but she's no danger to Aaron and the dragons.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I start to like your little dragons. each of them belonging to a different kind and caring a wise story. I really like this part about being part of the family :"As a knight, he was well aware of the danger in creating an outcast. These were dragons, not humans, but the same principle might well apply.

"Perhaps we should," he said. "If we don't let him be part of the family, he won't be."

Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

Thanks. Aaron's pretty smart. He would see creating an outcast as pretty much the same thing as creating a traitor, and a traitor can be more dangerous than an enemy.

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

Another excellent chapter in your book about the dragons, which keep growing in number. Looks like there will continue to be some interesting fighting between the dragons as they sort out their pecking order. Thanks for sharing your creativity.
Bill

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

Thanks. I couldn't let them get along, could I? That could get dull!

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

Lots of excitement in this chapter. A new dragon, Black and Demon facing off, the witch appearing again.

It intrigues me that the all-knowing Pink can't or won't identify Black. And that the witch is being coy. Adds a layer of mystery. But I would have expected Aaron to ask advice from Pink or for her to volunteer.

Please note the following:


"Mountain climbed onto Aaron's shoulder, followed by yellow." - Yellow

"It's OK kid," said Aaron. - okay

By the way "kid" seems slightly off in the context of knights and squires and witches. Just saying.

"He reared up, striking Black hard with his hoofs" - hooves

Given the size of the dragon, that would be a killing blow. Perhaps " striking Black a glancing blow with a hoof"

"Aaron contemplated leaving the sword and shield where it was" - "where they were"

"He took it with him." - "He took them with him."

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

Thanks. I'll get right on that spag.

reply by juliaSjames on 08-Oct-2019

You're welcome

reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

I meant to nominate you for catching all that spag. It's fixed. I couldn't get back to the same review, so it will have to wait till next chapter.

reply by juliaSjames on 08-Oct-2019

Hey thanks. I love your book.

JJ

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Each dragon possesses its own strengths and weaknesses. This makes them unique. Plenty of excitement abounds and "Black" seems to have learned his lesson. In the last line "sward" should be "sword".

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019

Thanks for catching that. It's fixed. Glad you're enjoying my story.