Aaron's Dragons
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Trouble Starts"An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs
19 total reviews
Comment from Nowhereman1
Very well written chapter. The story is engaging and entertaining. The characters and setting are really fun to follow. Thank you for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
Very well written chapter. The story is engaging and entertaining. The characters and setting are really fun to follow. Thank you for sharing your story.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2019
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Thanks. I'm so glad you're enjoying my story.
Comment from lyenochka
Another great post and I liked your many distinct personalities that you have given the dragons. I wonder how many more are going to hatch? Seems like a very heavy responsibility.
Suggestion:
"What now," Aaron asked his horse." (question mark instead of a comma)
" fallen log,then" (space needed)
Question:
", finding the food he'd left for him. Pink saw him eating and joined him."
I feel like some information is missing. Did Aaron cook the deer meat? Was he eating the deer meat? Did he leave some of the deer meat for Mountain? Is that what Pink and Mountain are eating? This part wasn't as clear to me but I know your didn't want to get too long. You could have made this two posts and go into more detail about the foods and how it smelled and tasted to a very hungry Aaron.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
Another great post and I liked your many distinct personalities that you have given the dragons. I wonder how many more are going to hatch? Seems like a very heavy responsibility.
Suggestion:
"What now," Aaron asked his horse." (question mark instead of a comma)
" fallen log,then" (space needed)
Question:
", finding the food he'd left for him. Pink saw him eating and joined him."
I feel like some information is missing. Did Aaron cook the deer meat? Was he eating the deer meat? Did he leave some of the deer meat for Mountain? Is that what Pink and Mountain are eating? This part wasn't as clear to me but I know your didn't want to get too long. You could have made this two posts and go into more detail about the foods and how it smelled and tasted to a very hungry Aaron.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks. No, Aaron didn't cook the meat. The smoke would attract attention. He left it outside for the dragons to find. Aaron has been eating whatever apples or berries he can find.
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, the problems and joys of telepathic communication, especially with dragons. The hero has his work cut out for him, including keeping his horse safe from his charges.
You have a great imagination. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
Oh, the problems and joys of telepathic communication, especially with dragons. The hero has his work cut out for him, including keeping his horse safe from his charges.
You have a great imagination. Keep writing.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. Yep, Aaron has his hands full, and his life is about to get interesting.
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LOL. I love the foreshadowing in your reply.
Comment from Sylvia Page
Aaron seems to be doing an awesome job in training the dragons to fend for themselves. They are happy that way as it gives them some sort of entertainment as well.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
Aaron seems to be doing an awesome job in training the dragons to fend for themselves. They are happy that way as it gives them some sort of entertainment as well.
Sylvia
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. They'll have to grow up fast.
Comment from Pathim
It seems like a balanced relationship between Aaron and the sea dragon. It's more than just a natural connection but a conscious one. It makes for an interesting story.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
It seems like a balanced relationship between Aaron and the sea dragon. It's more than just a natural connection but a conscious one. It makes for an interesting story.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. He's attached to all of them, but a couple are special.
Comment from Paige Kostyniuk
There was a lot to say, and nothing really to keep my attention and want to continue reading. I thought this was too much of something that was boring to read. I couldn't really keep reading without thinking how long this was. It would've been better with a better pick of stories to write. Lacking entertainment.
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There was a lot to say, and nothing really to keep my attention and want to continue reading. I thought this was too much of something that was boring to read. I couldn't really keep reading without thinking how long this was. It would've been better with a better pick of stories to write. Lacking entertainment.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
Comment from Diana L Crawford
How sad that this young man has to do this all by himself. And now he won't even have another person to share his experience with. I think it's so cute the mountain dragon is so attached to him!
Can't wait for next chapter!!! xoxo
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
How sad that this young man has to do this all by himself. And now he won't even have another person to share his experience with. I think it's so cute the mountain dragon is so attached to him!
Can't wait for next chapter!!! xoxo
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. He'll have a bit of help, and of course he has the dragons.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good episode. As the dragons learn to find their own food, life will get easier for them and for Aaron. The water dragon has some major role here that isn't yet clear. I like the mountain dragon the best so far. :)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
Good episode. As the dragons learn to find their own food, life will get easier for them and for Aaron. The water dragon has some major role here that isn't yet clear. I like the mountain dragon the best so far. :)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. Yep, the little guys will have to look after themselves. I don't want to reveal too much too soon.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Cindy Warren
I like the dream part of your amazing witting of picturing in our minds how realistic Aron's dream was..
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
Hello Cindy Warren
I like the dream part of your amazing witting of picturing in our minds how realistic Aron's dream was..
Gert
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. He is connecting with the water dragon in his dreams.
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Hello Cindy
thank you for letting me that Aron is connecting with the water dragon in his dreams.
Gert
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great writing that captured my interest and is very creative. I like how the dragons have unique personalities and special skills. The story flows well and is easy to read.
Bill
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
Great writing that captured my interest and is very creative. I like how the dragons have unique personalities and special skills. The story flows well and is easy to read.
Bill
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Thanks. Yep, the little guys are pretty special.