Josephine
Until my dying day...22 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad tale and reminds me of 'Great Expectations' by Charles Dickens when Miss Haversham was rejected by her lover, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a sad tale and reminds me of 'Great Expectations' by Charles Dickens when Miss Haversham was rejected by her lover, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for honoring this with a comparison to such a great author! I went to bed and the first line kept rolling through my head so I had to get up and write it! I?m sure you know that one well! Haha! xoxo
Comment from Janetsue
This is an excellent entry for the sadness contest. The greatest sorrow humans experience is often centered upon someone lost. The beautiful painting portrays the emotion very well and is another strong aspect of your posting. Best wishes in the contest! xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is an excellent entry for the sadness contest. The greatest sorrow humans experience is often centered upon someone lost. The beautiful painting portrays the emotion very well and is another strong aspect of your posting. Best wishes in the contest! xoxo
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much! I wasn?t going to enter this and when I went to bed the other night, the first two lines kept playing in my head. Well you know what happened next! Haha! A writer can never sleep when there is a poem waiting to escape! Those muses can pick the most inconvenient times! Haha! So happy you stopped to read! xoxo
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You're very welcome, Diana. And what you say about that pesky muse is right on target! lol
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Diana. I really like this one. It has the sound of a sad melancholy verse from many years ago. Some of the description is written in a style that reminds me of early 20th century. The darkness in the picture reflects the darkness in the verse. I like that a lot. Perhaps the way you handle the sadness adds to the melancholy. Superb in my world. Robert
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Hey Diana. I really like this one. It has the sound of a sad melancholy verse from many years ago. Some of the description is written in a style that reminds me of early 20th century. The darkness in the picture reflects the darkness in the verse. I like that a lot. Perhaps the way you handle the sadness adds to the melancholy. Superb in my world. Robert
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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thanks Robert! I am so glad you like it! It does have an past era tone to it as one would just call someone up on their cell phone these days and tell them off! LOL!! appreciate your wonderful comment and your generous rating for this one! xoxo
Comment from judiverse
This certainly fits the Sadness category, and best of luck in the contest. The use of black and white is effective. This reminds me of Queen Victoria, who wore her mourning black for the rest of her life after her husband died. I just read about Sarah Hale (author of "Mary Had a Little Lamb") and she also continued to wear black after her husband's death. In your poem we don't know for sure what happened to the man who left. Maybe he was one of those faithless love them and leave them types many of us have experienced. Usually we pick ourselves up and move on. You do a wonderful job of conveying the emotion this woman feels. judi
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This certainly fits the Sadness category, and best of luck in the contest. The use of black and white is effective. This reminds me of Queen Victoria, who wore her mourning black for the rest of her life after her husband died. I just read about Sarah Hale (author of "Mary Had a Little Lamb") and she also continued to wear black after her husband's death. In your poem we don't know for sure what happened to the man who left. Maybe he was one of those faithless love them and leave them types many of us have experienced. Usually we pick ourselves up and move on. You do a wonderful job of conveying the emotion this woman feels. judi
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Yes, I thought it a bit of an aged romantic poem, but loved it by the time I was done! so appreciate your supportive encouragement! You don't really know if something happened at sea, or he found a girl in the next port! :) xoxo
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The way you captured the mood really sounded authentic. judi
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Oh Josephine your sadness is plain for all to see.
A very poignant image which supports the emotive tale unfolding.
A fine entry in the SADNESS contest and very clear meaning and imagery.
Good luck.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Oh Josephine your sadness is plain for all to see.
A very poignant image which supports the emotive tale unfolding.
A fine entry in the SADNESS contest and very clear meaning and imagery.
Good luck.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much! I wasn't even going to enter, and then in the middle of the night "Josephine, oh Josephine" came to my brain, and so i had to get up and write it LOL! appreciate your precious review! xoxo
Comment from LyndaS
That's my girl! This touched the hopeless romantic in me. The sailor...the absence...the sorrow. I loved "the scent of jasmine in my hair left him no earthly doubt." I saw all of this immediately as I read. Killer art to go with this. Ending this with weeping beneath the veil until your breathless dying day pretty much sums it all up. A strong post for this contest. Love your stuff, Sista! Good luck. I mean it. Lynda
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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That's my girl! This touched the hopeless romantic in me. The sailor...the absence...the sorrow. I loved "the scent of jasmine in my hair left him no earthly doubt." I saw all of this immediately as I read. Killer art to go with this. Ending this with weeping beneath the veil until your breathless dying day pretty much sums it all up. A strong post for this contest. Love your stuff, Sista! Good luck. I mean it. Lynda
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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oh, yeah! I knew you would appreciate this one! the first line came into my head as I was going to bed and you can imagine i got no sleep when it did until i wrote it! haha! thanks for the generous 6, sista!! love ya! xoxo
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Sadness Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective Content and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
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Good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a Sadness Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective Content and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
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Good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you my friend! I really enjoyed writing this even with the sad theme! Appreciate your encouraging feedback! xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A lovely poem you wrote. It brings the sadness right to one's eyes. Love your writing as you already know. (I love to read and write poetry). Such a blessing to be able to express love, whether it's good or bad.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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A lovely poem you wrote. It brings the sadness right to one's eyes. Love your writing as you already know. (I love to read and write poetry). Such a blessing to be able to express love, whether it's good or bad.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for being such an encouraging supporter! I am so happy you enjoyed! I love to read and write poetry too! xoxo
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is very mournful, Diana. Your choice of sorrow words is perfect right down to the breathless dying day image. I like the format with the introductory stanza. I was wondering, though, how to set it apart a little better. I had to pause in my reading to make sure that the narrator changed. Maybe you could do a different font or quote marks, just something to keep the reader from having to pause.
It's a good poem. I bet that you win.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is very mournful, Diana. Your choice of sorrow words is perfect right down to the breathless dying day image. I like the format with the introductory stanza. I was wondering, though, how to set it apart a little better. I had to pause in my reading to make sure that the narrator changed. Maybe you could do a different font or quote marks, just something to keep the reader from having to pause.
It's a good poem. I bet that you win.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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thanks Debbie, i understand what you mean. I could make the first stanza with quotation marks and the rest as the person replying. :) thanks for your always supportive reviews! xoxoxo
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It's was clear that it was two voices, but I did have to stop to make sure. The first stanza in quotes would do the trick for sure.
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Appreciated! I have added that now and it does flow better! :) xoxo
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I agree.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This charming story appears to be about a bygone day and the picture is in keeping with that notion. it has a melancholy feel to it and is an excellent entry for the "Sadness" contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This charming story appears to be about a bygone day and the picture is in keeping with that notion. it has a melancholy feel to it and is an excellent entry for the "Sadness" contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you! So glad you enjoyed! My muse must be from a long ago age as today you?d just get on the cell phone and ask them where the heck they are! LoL! Appreciate your encouragement!!! xoxo
