Smoky Jazz Blue
I really liked her...too bad we'd interacted...7 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
Wonderfully penned. Straight to the point without giving the hypocrite lecteur the possibility of thinking until the end of the story! Amazing! There is a typo in the seventh paragraph : Stcky needs an "I".
A great work! Blessings and thank you for sharing. Tony
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Wonderfully penned. Straight to the point without giving the hypocrite lecteur the possibility of thinking until the end of the story! Amazing! There is a typo in the seventh paragraph : Stcky needs an "I".
A great work! Blessings and thank you for sharing. Tony
Comment Written 17-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2019
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Well, as I joke with some friends on here: I see that you've been rummaging through my closet... LOL!! ;) :) Glad you enjoyed this one, but, I have to warn you for future reference, you just NEVER know what you'll find in there, sir!! ;) :) Thanx for these lovely stars, Tony, and for the typo catch -- all are so very much appreciated!! ;) :) Take care over there in your corner of the world! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I really enjoyed reading it. The story was not predictable which made it very interesting. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. I really enjoyed reading it. The story was not predictable which made it very interesting. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Sallyo
Hardboiled - or film noir...this is a fine slick entry in the contest. The whole deal goes down smoothly, and it seems no one is left alive to identify Mr Tux.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Hardboiled - or film noir...this is a fine slick entry in the contest. The whole deal goes down smoothly, and it seems no one is left alive to identify Mr Tux.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Sallyo, for the great review!
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a good entry for the contest {smiles}.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
I adjusted my bowtie and took the stcky note -- Spags? I think it's "bow tie". And have you you've mis-typed "sticky" or is there a "stcky" brand?
I heard the sound of footsteps and readied my 'gift'. -- Ha, ha. I like the in-quotes gift here {smiles}.
Best of luck when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a good entry for the contest {smiles}.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
I adjusted my bowtie and took the stcky note -- Spags? I think it's "bow tie". And have you you've mis-typed "sticky" or is there a "stcky" brand?
I heard the sound of footsteps and readied my 'gift'. -- Ha, ha. I like the in-quotes gift here {smiles}.
Best of luck when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I added a note about 'sticky' since you mentioned it...everyone around the office and that I've spoken to 'in conversation' just calls the Post-It notes sticky notes. Thank you for the thoughtful review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Cool kill for f
Thrill in a blue disguise. You should look before you open the door to strangers. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Cool kill for f
Thrill in a blue disguise. You should look before you open the door to strangers. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Wow, this guy really doesn't want any loose ends. I certainly hope I never meet him. Is his client safe? I can imagine this guy taking the money and then tying up that loose end too.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Wow, this guy really doesn't want any loose ends. I certainly hope I never meet him. Is his client safe? I can imagine this guy taking the money and then tying up that loose end too.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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No loose ends or emotional ties.... thank you for your review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This was certainly full of unexpected twists and turns, and yet the author has managed to take each thread to its conclusion within the short word count allocated.
I enjoyed it very much, except for ""Now, that's good for about fifteen minutes, so you'd better make a good impression or" -she winked, knowingly- "you'll be stuck in the penthouse together all night."" which puzzled me, even after two read throughs.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This was certainly full of unexpected twists and turns, and yet the author has managed to take each thread to its conclusion within the short word count allocated.
I enjoyed it very much, except for ""Now, that's good for about fifteen minutes, so you'd better make a good impression or" -she winked, knowingly- "you'll be stuck in the penthouse together all night."" which puzzled me, even after two read throughs.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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He just took the sticky note with the elevator passcode written on it from her.... Thank you for your review!
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thanks for the clarification - it could be me that's dense, but I don't think I'd have ever guessed, if more people ask, maybe you should find an alternative.
