Calm This Bitter Pain
Sadness contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from Willie P. Smith
This is a beautiful tribute, very sad. To lose a child is torture to the parents. The rhyme in this poem is perfect and very heartfelt. You did an
excellent job on this.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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This is a beautiful tribute, very sad. To lose a child is torture to the parents. The rhyme in this poem is perfect and very heartfelt. You did an
excellent job on this.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2019
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Wow, thank you for the great review and the big sixer, Willie. I actually wrote this from my aunt's point of view. A couple of my cousins took their own lives. One was just around a year ago. I just can't imagine what she's going through. That's where this piece came from. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. Have a great day. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from Susan Larson
Having lost two sons, I know the anguish you feel, but when it's suicide, the pain, accompanied by questions and second guesses is so much more. You have my empathy. May God be with you.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Having lost two sons, I know the anguish you feel, but when it's suicide, the pain, accompanied by questions and second guesses is so much more. You have my empathy. May God be with you.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Susan. My prayers go out to you as well. I actually wrote this from my aunt's perspective. 2 of my 5 cousins from her family killed themselves. The last one was not too long ago. I just can't imagine what she's going through. I'm so sorry for your loss, Susan. May Got keep watch over you as well.
Ron
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When I wrote changing times (see my portfolio) I originally did it in third person because I could not write it in first. Twenty years removed some of the raw grief. How grateful your aunt must be that someone else could feel this and write this for her. You touched my heart.
Comment from Edna Estrada
I can't imagine a greater pain than the loss of a child. Especially by suicide. There is a never ending sense of grieve to this poem that I think really promotes the contest theme of sadness. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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I can't imagine a greater pain than the loss of a child. Especially by suicide. There is a never ending sense of grieve to this poem that I think really promotes the contest theme of sadness. Good Luck!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Edna. This was actually written about my aunt. 2 of her boys took that way out and I just can't even fathom what she's going through. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from moonsunrise
My heartfelt condolences on the loss of your son. I, too, lost a nephew to suicide several months ago. I believe he is in heaven. Only God and the person creating the act truly knows what was going on. For my nephew, I know, there is no way he would have ended his life and hurt the entire family. He truly was not in his right mind and I believe that the Lord, our heavenly Father, knew this. Your son is probably looking down at you now from heaven along with my nephew looking down at all of us. Their at peace; we are the ones who are suffering. God bless you! Hugs and prayers.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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My heartfelt condolences on the loss of your son. I, too, lost a nephew to suicide several months ago. I believe he is in heaven. Only God and the person creating the act truly knows what was going on. For my nephew, I know, there is no way he would have ended his life and hurt the entire family. He truly was not in his right mind and I believe that the Lord, our heavenly Father, knew this. Your son is probably looking down at you now from heaven along with my nephew looking down at all of us. Their at peace; we are the ones who are suffering. God bless you! Hugs and prayers.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Moonsunrise. I actually wrote this piece from my aunt's point of view. 2 of her 5 children ended their own lives. The latest was around a year ago. I just can't imagine how she must feel. That's where this piece came from. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words, Moon. Have a great week.
Ron
Comment from Patty Palmer
My dear, my heart at this moment is breaking for you. I wish there was something I could say or do to help heal your heart. I lost a son too, but from illness, not suicide. I cannot even begin to imagine what you must be feeling. I see where you say you hope that his life didn't go to waste with Satan. Our minister at church committed suicide about 3 years ago. For some reason I thought that suicide was a sin and not let you into Heaven. I was told that pastor was a child of God, He was accepting of Jesus so not necessarily would pastor have gone to Hell. He said that our Lord is a forgiving Lord so hold on to that. And if your son committed suicide, I would not think that anyone who does that would be thinking very clearly, so maybe God already knew he was struggling and I wouldn't think God would not take care of one of his children who is ill. I'm no preacher! I go to church and believe in God Almighty and I believe He loves us all. I don't know if anything I said here helped or not. I just know that when I was reading your poem, I felt I couldn't go on without saying something. Should you need an ear, I'm a good listener and I always have an extra shoulder for a friend. God bless you!
Patty
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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My dear, my heart at this moment is breaking for you. I wish there was something I could say or do to help heal your heart. I lost a son too, but from illness, not suicide. I cannot even begin to imagine what you must be feeling. I see where you say you hope that his life didn't go to waste with Satan. Our minister at church committed suicide about 3 years ago. For some reason I thought that suicide was a sin and not let you into Heaven. I was told that pastor was a child of God, He was accepting of Jesus so not necessarily would pastor have gone to Hell. He said that our Lord is a forgiving Lord so hold on to that. And if your son committed suicide, I would not think that anyone who does that would be thinking very clearly, so maybe God already knew he was struggling and I wouldn't think God would not take care of one of his children who is ill. I'm no preacher! I go to church and believe in God Almighty and I believe He loves us all. I don't know if anything I said here helped or not. I just know that when I was reading your poem, I felt I couldn't go on without saying something. Should you need an ear, I'm a good listener and I always have an extra shoulder for a friend. God bless you!
Patty
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, Patty. I actually wrote this from my aunt's perspective. She had five children and two of them took their own lives. One was just over a year ago. I'm sure they were very close with God before they went through with it. So hopefully they are in heaven looking down. I'm so sorry to hear about your boy. That had to have been so hard to deal with. We'll never know God's plan until we're there. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind review, Patty. I hope you have a wonderful day. Thank you again.
Ron
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You're welcome Ron! Who are we to question God's plan. We may never know the reason why anything happens, Our son who passed away from Huntington's Disease we had adopted, He had 2 biologcal sisters They both died from it at ages 22 and 36, His bio mother, three aunts and his bio grampa all died of that dreaded disease and all at young ages. It's back to the question Why does God let bad things happen to good people? I'm sure He has a plan for it all. Take care and have a good day
Patty
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow... just, wow, Ron... I don't even know where to begin with this one, sir -- the depths of sadness in which your quatrains are spun and to which they drag the reader are profound, to say the least. I cannot even begin to imagine your pain... but you do a wonderful job weaving it into the lines here for all of us to experience. Thank you for such a testimony and may your prayers be answered and you find peace.... Yvette
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Wow... just, wow, Ron... I don't even know where to begin with this one, sir -- the depths of sadness in which your quatrains are spun and to which they drag the reader are profound, to say the least. I cannot even begin to imagine your pain... but you do a wonderful job weaving it into the lines here for all of us to experience. Thank you for such a testimony and may your prayers be answered and you find peace.... Yvette
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Yvette. I actually wrote this from my aunt's point of view. She had four boys and a girl and two of the boys took their own lives. One was around a year ago. I couldn't imagine what she went through, but I tried with this piece. Hopefully I did what the contest was requiring. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words, Yvette. Have a great day. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very sad poem and I certainly hope it is fiction, not truth. It is well written. I wish you the best in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a very sad poem and I certainly hope it is fiction, not truth. It is well written. I wish you the best in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Debbie. I actually wrote this from my aunt's point of view. For me, it's just fiction but for her it wasn't. I appreciate the generous stars. Have a wonderful day.
Ron
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This skillfully touches on the difficulty of dealing with a suicide in the family. The last stanza indicates that the speaker in the poem comes from a probable Protestant or Catholic point of view. I guess I come at it from a different point of view, being LDS, but I absolutely have feeling for the experience going on here. I was trying to locate a little book in my room, by a leader in our church named M. Russell Ballard called "Suicide: Some Things We Know and Some We Don't." Thanks for posting this poem, because I had forgotten last night my errand while cleaning out the closet. Now I remember, so thank you.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This skillfully touches on the difficulty of dealing with a suicide in the family. The last stanza indicates that the speaker in the poem comes from a probable Protestant or Catholic point of view. I guess I come at it from a different point of view, being LDS, but I absolutely have feeling for the experience going on here. I was trying to locate a little book in my room, by a leader in our church named M. Russell Ballard called "Suicide: Some Things We Know and Some We Don't." Thanks for posting this poem, because I had forgotten last night my errand while cleaning out the closet. Now I remember, so thank you.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Crystie. Yes, I was raised to believe you were hell bound if you committed suicide. I surely hope not though. Two of my aunt's boys took their own lives. One was just about a year ago. That's where this piece came from, imagining what pain she must be going through. I really appreciate the gracious stars, Crystie. Thank you again. Have a wonderful day.
Ron
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That's a hard one all-around. I have not had an immediate relative succeed in committing suicide, but depression hits certain members of my family and cousins every so often. I had a couple of experiences that leads me to believe God is much more merciful than we know about this act.
Comment from aanneee
This is a real tear-jerker, my best friend's 29 year old son did this just over two years ago, not anything a parent can let go of. I would love to say how much I like it - but I can't. It is a very good write and the reader can see and hear her pain. I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This is a real tear-jerker, my best friend's 29 year old son did this just over two years ago, not anything a parent can let go of. I would love to say how much I like it - but I can't. It is a very good write and the reader can see and hear her pain. I wish you luck in the contest - Dinah
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review, Dinah. Two of my cousins from the same family killed themselves. One was just a little more than a year ago. I simply can't imagine my aunt's pain. I appreciate the gracious stars. Thank you again.
Ron
