I Carry My Rainbow
The spectrum of happiness.9 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. It was an interesting technique to me that you used. Stanza one and two were both about individuals. Stanza three completed the poem with what two can do together. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Hello mystery writer. It was an interesting technique to me that you used. Stanza one and two were both about individuals. Stanza three completed the poem with what two can do together. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your review and comments.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a special rainbow coloured surf board the surfer carries while walking to find the perfect waves to ride, when he is caught in the rain it becomes his rainbow umbrella.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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A very well-written poem about a special rainbow coloured surf board the surfer carries while walking to find the perfect waves to ride, when he is caught in the rain it becomes his rainbow umbrella.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your review. Carrying a rainbow inside ourselves is a great was to keep feeling happy.
Comment from humpwhistle
A touching and inspiring poem of love and optimism.
Before I saw your poem, when I'd only read the title 'I carry my rainbow',
a neat line hit me: Some people carry umbrellas, I carry a rainbow.
See? I told you it was inspiring.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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A touching and inspiring poem of love and optimism.
Before I saw your poem, when I'd only read the title 'I carry my rainbow',
a neat line hit me: Some people carry umbrellas, I carry a rainbow.
See? I told you it was inspiring.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Haha - I like your addition to the 'I carry my rainbow' line.
Thanks for your comments, Lee.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, title,
and presentation.
-I like your poem, too.
-The opening line of
each verse is very good,
and the poem flows well.
-The concluding verse
is very good, and the
sunshine is a good symbol
for the love you share.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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-Nice image, title,
and presentation.
-I like your poem, too.
-The opening line of
each verse is very good,
and the poem flows well.
-The concluding verse
is very good, and the
sunshine is a good symbol
for the love you share.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks very much for your feedback. I'm pleased you like my poem.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from royowen
A nicely written and a deftly engineered narrative, written in a differently rhymed the from convention norms, a language sound post that's a winner in this contest, the smooth narrative is not only well scribed, But has an ballad rhyme scheme, abcb well done, good look, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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A nicely written and a deftly engineered narrative, written in a differently rhymed the from convention norms, a language sound post that's a winner in this contest, the smooth narrative is not only well scribed, But has an ballad rhyme scheme, abcb well done, good look, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your supportive and helpful comments, Roy.
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Most welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A colourful presentation with positive vibes for love and life here in the shape of a rainbow surf board, a bright light shining amidst the mud, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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A colourful presentation with positive vibes for love and life here in the shape of a rainbow surf board, a bright light shining amidst the mud, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. It's a very pretty surfboard.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very simple, but beautiful poem my friend, speaking of powerful love they have. Best wishes in the contest with this lovely entry~Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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A very simple, but beautiful poem my friend, speaking of powerful love they have. Best wishes in the contest with this lovely entry~Debbie
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your nice comments about this poem, Debbie.
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very well written rhyming poem. I really like the sentiment. Tha artwork and presentation are excellent. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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This is a very well written rhyming poem. I really like the sentiment. Tha artwork and presentation are excellent. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a sweet little romantic poem. The picture is an interesting choice because it doesn't fit the poem exactly. The surfing metaphor would fit the first and last verses, but not the middle one.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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This is a sweet little romantic poem. The picture is an interesting choice because it doesn't fit the poem exactly. The surfing metaphor would fit the first and last verses, but not the middle one.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your comments. The poem is more about the rainbow (feeling good - happiness), rather than surfing, so the rainbow theme is carried through the poem. The metaphor is the rainbow, not the surfboard.
