The Fae Nation
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Creteus"Still just a germ of an idea that the moment
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Comment from robyn corum
Bob,
A whole different setting - wasn't expecting that. Though I didn't realize I had also missed some chapters at the beginning. I'll have to catch up when I have a minute free.
A couple of nits:
1.) He slid (off) the chair. Creteus remained sitting,
2.) Creteus remained sitting, but he still towered (over?) the leprechaun.
Intriguing and entertaining. Thank you!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Bob,
A whole different setting - wasn't expecting that. Though I didn't realize I had also missed some chapters at the beginning. I'll have to catch up when I have a minute free.
A couple of nits:
1.) He slid (off) the chair. Creteus remained sitting,
2.) Creteus remained sitting, but he still towered (over?) the leprechaun.
Intriguing and entertaining. Thank you!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Oops, thanks for the spag. And thanks as ever for the review
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
as closely related to coffee as he was to a giraffe. (I don't get the giraffe part)
If he was generous(,) he might have put it at forty bodies
They're my blood(,) but I'm closer to you than to them.
A good chapter to your story, my friend~debbie
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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as closely related to coffee as he was to a giraffe. (I don't get the giraffe part)
If he was generous(,) he might have put it at forty bodies
They're my blood(,) but I'm closer to you than to them.
A good chapter to your story, my friend~debbie
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your review and spags. As he's a leprechaun, I thought the furthest beast from him would be a tall one, like a giraffe. Oh well, I can't hit it out of the park every time.
Comment from Adri7enne
I'm fascinated by the shadow under the chair. Have you introduced this shadow before? I can't remember it. I get a strange feeling, like this bigotry thing doesn't have to be imagined. There's enough of that in the real world to fuel several novels and it doesn't make me feel happy to recognize it. This is more serious than your usual stuff. Or am I just catching some of that "Mal du monde"?? Feels like the world is gone a little mad and everything reflects that. Even my favorite writer. Sigh! You're supposed to make me laugh. Love ya anyway. Keep writing.
'One by one someone had introduced themselves, name and species, ' So witty!
'Creteus remained sitting, but he still towered OF the leprechaun.' Here we'd say: "towered OVER the leprechaun."
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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I'm fascinated by the shadow under the chair. Have you introduced this shadow before? I can't remember it. I get a strange feeling, like this bigotry thing doesn't have to be imagined. There's enough of that in the real world to fuel several novels and it doesn't make me feel happy to recognize it. This is more serious than your usual stuff. Or am I just catching some of that "Mal du monde"?? Feels like the world is gone a little mad and everything reflects that. Even my favorite writer. Sigh! You're supposed to make me laugh. Love ya anyway. Keep writing.
'One by one someone had introduced themselves, name and species, ' So witty!
'Creteus remained sitting, but he still towered OF the leprechaun.' Here we'd say: "towered OVER the leprechaun."
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thanks for another generous review and the spag. The shadow was introduced when Peter first entered the meeting room (Chapter 3). Sorry for the seriousness of this chapter. I'll see if the next one is lighter, just for you
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Oooh, just for me! I'm flattered. Lol! Write 'cause you love it, Bob.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Very well written chapter with a lot of imagination that expresses a good message. Thanks for sharing your creative skill in this way! Keep on writing and I look forward to next chapter!
Bill
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Very well written chapter with a lot of imagination that expresses a good message. Thanks for sharing your creative skill in this way! Keep on writing and I look forward to next chapter!
Bill
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from JLR
A tremendous write. Very creative character this Creteus. Fits nicely into the backstory as you continue to unfold a wonder journey in the land of the fairy. Thanks for your sharing and continued good success.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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A tremendous write. Very creative character this Creteus. Fits nicely into the backstory as you continue to unfold a wonder journey in the land of the fairy. Thanks for your sharing and continued good success.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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You're very kind, thank you