Autumn Rapture
For all of you who love Autumn39 total reviews
Comment from Harley Dayman Rayne Quinn
It was nice and sweet to the point.
I love the picture and the background color that goes to it.
Good job. Fall is my favorite season for other reasons but still I love it. It also bring outfit the best outfits for women
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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It was nice and sweet to the point.
I love the picture and the background color that goes to it.
Good job. Fall is my favorite season for other reasons but still I love it. It also bring outfit the best outfits for women
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Harley, for your kind praise of my poem and the picture. Rod
Comment from Raul1
I think that this poem has a very good chance of winning! It is easy to read and understand. I like how you wrote this poem. No grammatical errors. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I think that this poem has a very good chance of winning! It is easy to read and understand. I like how you wrote this poem. No grammatical errors. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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I am very pleased you like my poem so much, Raul. Many thanks for sharing AUTUMN RAPTURE. Rod
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You're welcome.
Comment from Cedar
Hello Rod,
This is a very well written poem and presented in a way that should draw the attention of many readers.
However, if you don't mind, the word "spanked" seems out of place to me. Knocked or pushed has a better sound, but that's only my opinion.
Have a great day and good luck in the contest, my friend...Bill
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Hello Rod,
This is a very well written poem and presented in a way that should draw the attention of many readers.
However, if you don't mind, the word "spanked" seems out of place to me. Knocked or pushed has a better sound, but that's only my opinion.
Have a great day and good luck in the contest, my friend...Bill
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Hi Cedar. You are one of several reviewers who took exception to my choice of ?spanked.? Now that the contest is over, I will consider other options. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from lauralumummu
This poem is just lovely and has a terrific flow except the word spanked I would have chosen something like tossed instead. But I really liked it and the words brought the beauty of fall to life.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This poem is just lovely and has a terrific flow except the word spanked I would have chosen something like tossed instead. But I really liked it and the words brought the beauty of fall to life.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Ouch! You are the third reviewer who dislikes that word. What about SMACKED? Please know I truly appreciate your kind praise of my poem in general. Many thanks!
Comment from royowen
Well done, this is a time of the year, probably more than any other that stirs poetic coals, bringing forth a plethora of emotion at the sheer beauty that death engenders, where the trees wrap up the seasons. Well done, a beautifully written entry in this contest. In abca rhyming, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Well done, this is a time of the year, probably more than any other that stirs poetic coals, bringing forth a plethora of emotion at the sheer beauty that death engenders, where the trees wrap up the seasons. Well done, a beautifully written entry in this contest. In abca rhyming, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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I like how you phrased it: ?beauty that death engenders.? That truly describes Autumn. Many thanks for your very kind praise of my poem, Roy.
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Well done
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an exquisite write, beautiful in its lyric verse and unforced rhyme. I had only one very minor suggestion, in light of the texture of the poem, which is reminiscent of the masters, one word in the piece, "spanked." It seems so common and out of place in such a beautiful poem, especially since there are so many that might be more poetic in look and sound - cuffed, felled, flogged, even struck, just examples - of course, the decision is yours. You can see, it did not affect my rating of your piece...
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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In my opinion, an exquisite write, beautiful in its lyric verse and unforced rhyme. I had only one very minor suggestion, in light of the texture of the poem, which is reminiscent of the masters, one word in the piece, "spanked." It seems so common and out of place in such a beautiful poem, especially since there are so many that might be more poetic in look and sound - cuffed, felled, flogged, even struck, just examples - of course, the decision is yours. You can see, it did not affect my rating of your piece...
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, eyesayshi, for your enthusiastic response to AUTUMN RAPTURE and those six bright stars. I had considered using other words than ?spanked.? What do you think of SMACKED?
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You are very welcome indeed - no, no, no, please no - the piece is just too, too beautiful! How about - to repeat this one, cuffed...or pelted or threshed or welted or clonked (applying poetic license with this one) or, last one, tanned. These are just a bit more poetic sounding, in my opinion, of course - regardless, I love your poem...Eve
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Thank you. Each word you suggested has possibilities.
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Whatever you decide - I'm certain your choice will be the best, because it truly is a wonderful poem...Eve
Comment from Kathleen S.
Your poem is very moving. It captures the beauty of Autumn perfectly. I love the imagery in your poem, and the artwork you've chosen for it. It makes the reader want to go for a long walk through the park just to see the leaves change.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Your poem is very moving. It captures the beauty of Autumn perfectly. I love the imagery in your poem, and the artwork you've chosen for it. It makes the reader want to go for a long walk through the park just to see the leaves change.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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I am delighted my poem has given you the desire to take a long walk in the park. Many thanks, Kathleen, for your very kind praise of AUTUMN RAPTURE.
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You are most welcome. I like to walk in the park. Your poem reminded me of such walks.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
Your poem is quite lovely...the images you draw here with your words are specific and dramatic, causing the read to bring those dramatic autumn colors to life in the mind JUST before they appear in real life. *smile*
There ARE so many things to love about the fall season - the cool weather, FOOTBALL (*smile*), back to school (a reprieve for lots of parents.) The image you've chosen is also very pretty and wonderfully appropriate.
All together, I think you have a good entry. Thanks and best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Dear Mystery Poet,
Your poem is quite lovely...the images you draw here with your words are specific and dramatic, causing the read to bring those dramatic autumn colors to life in the mind JUST before they appear in real life. *smile*
There ARE so many things to love about the fall season - the cool weather, FOOTBALL (*smile*), back to school (a reprieve for lots of parents.) The image you've chosen is also very pretty and wonderfully appropriate.
All together, I think you have a good entry. Thanks and best of luck to you!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you so much, robyn, for your very kind praise of AUTUMN RAPTURE. Indeed, there are so many things to like about this season--especially football.
Comment from estory
It's a nice pastoral romantic in a traditional rhymed quatrain format and style that carries a weight of mood with it, the mysterious wonder at the autumn trees and the magic of the turning leaves. It's full of color and taste and sound, and that puts us right in the middle of the scene. To lift it a bit more you have to connect it to something in the human experience; the frailty of life, the transient nature of life, the haunting strains of memory or something like that. It reminds me very much of Keats' Ode to Autumn, which I consider the standard setter of autumn poems. estory
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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It's a nice pastoral romantic in a traditional rhymed quatrain format and style that carries a weight of mood with it, the mysterious wonder at the autumn trees and the magic of the turning leaves. It's full of color and taste and sound, and that puts us right in the middle of the scene. To lift it a bit more you have to connect it to something in the human experience; the frailty of life, the transient nature of life, the haunting strains of memory or something like that. It reminds me very much of Keats' Ode to Autumn, which I consider the standard setter of autumn poems. estory
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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I truly appreciate your comments about AUTUMN RAPTURE, estory, and thank you for your kind praise. I like Keats' "Ode to Autumn," but my standard will always be Robert Frost's "Two Roads Diverged in a Yellow Wood."
Comment from Cheryl I
This is a nicely written poem and a good selection for the No Restrictions Poetry contest. "A callow youth I am again" is how fall makes me feel. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This is a nicely written poem and a good selection for the No Restrictions Poetry contest. "A callow youth I am again" is how fall makes me feel. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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I think Autumn makes anyone feel like a "callow youth" again. Many thanks for your kind praise of my poem, Cheryl.
