I Can't Do This Anymore
Tonight is the last night like this...22 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
A very good poem for the Love's Betrayal contest. Some leave, some stay, and some have a retaliatory affair for themselves. A boost for their own flagging self esteem. Betrayal is the worst of all the sins. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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A very good poem for the Love's Betrayal contest. Some leave, some stay, and some have a retaliatory affair for themselves. A boost for their own flagging self esteem. Betrayal is the worst of all the sins. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for stopping in on this one, Marilyn -- it was a tough write as I usually like to use my writing to 'cheer up and escape the madness of reality'.... gave this a try though. ;) :) Thanx for the review -- take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Joan E.
Wow, you really raged at betrayal in this poem! Your rhythm and rhymes in the quatrains intensified the descriptions and emotions. The artwork you selected symbolized the agitation as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Wow, you really raged at betrayal in this poem! Your rhythm and rhymes in the quatrains intensified the descriptions and emotions. The artwork you selected symbolized the agitation as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your review, Joan! :-) Yvette
Comment from Ronni
Ouch.....this one hurts....
A truly heartbreaking tragedy of betrayal, all the more grievous with
children involved by a cheating spouse. all innocent and so unpardonable
and unforgiveable! The repeating offense continuing, mounting the anguish and torment of reaching unearable stage, as it inevitably does
and must for this betraayed spouse, for the sake of her children, and
for her own dignity, sanity and endurance.
A tear searing read indeed, for far too often it goes on
and so much pain and suffering, especially for the youngest and
most innocent of all...children. Thanks for sharing....a reality trip
of most tremorous proportions and aftermaths.
Best always, Ronni
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Ouch.....this one hurts....
A truly heartbreaking tragedy of betrayal, all the more grievous with
children involved by a cheating spouse. all innocent and so unpardonable
and unforgiveable! The repeating offense continuing, mounting the anguish and torment of reaching unearable stage, as it inevitably does
and must for this betraayed spouse, for the sake of her children, and
for her own dignity, sanity and endurance.
A tear searing read indeed, for far too often it goes on
and so much pain and suffering, especially for the youngest and
most innocent of all...children. Thanks for sharing....a reality trip
of most tremorous proportions and aftermaths.
Best always, Ronni
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hey there again, Beautiful Lady!! ;) Sorry things seem a bit disjointed over here, but I'm still playing 'catch up' while working too!! ;) :) LOL! Thank you for the review on this one -- twas not my usual topic and definitely a lot harder to write, but we have to 'stretch' ourselves sometimes, yeah? Thanx again for your wonderful support... I'll be caught up soon... I promise!! ;) :) Yvette :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about the lover that betray not only his wife but also his children who believe he is the hero in their lives. When he makes his final decision he will break more than just his wife's heart and trust
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about the lover that betray not only his wife but also his children who believe he is the hero in their lives. When he makes his final decision he will break more than just his wife's heart and trust
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Gail Denham
Wow - take action. Why put up with this? When you have the children to consider. It's heart-breaking when this type behaviour ruins a home. Your poem describes it well.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Wow - take action. Why put up with this? When you have the children to consider. It's heart-breaking when this type behaviour ruins a home. Your poem describes it well.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from LisaMay
Whoaaaa.... this one's a heavy-hitter. It'll probably win. It's got the pain factor of little children involved. You have played our emotions to the max in your well-crafted poem. The Mama wolf fights for her family.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Whoaaaa.... this one's a heavy-hitter. It'll probably win. It's got the pain factor of little children involved. You have played our emotions to the max in your well-crafted poem. The Mama wolf fights for her family.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Twas a difficult one in places -- thank you for the great review!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Out of sixes, Mystery Writer, but your offering is worthy of six stars and more.
I cannot fathom being in a marriage such as you write, and yet, I know such situations exist far more often than many would care to admit.
Your writing is filled with keen visual and emotive imager, but more importantly, it touches a nerve - a nerve of wanting resolution to the anger, lies, betrayal, and overwhelming sadness.
Kudos...
Best Wishes,
diane
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Out of sixes, Mystery Writer, but your offering is worthy of six stars and more.
I cannot fathom being in a marriage such as you write, and yet, I know such situations exist far more often than many would care to admit.
Your writing is filled with keen visual and emotive imager, but more importantly, it touches a nerve - a nerve of wanting resolution to the anger, lies, betrayal, and overwhelming sadness.
Kudos...
Best Wishes,
diane
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Oh, it's okay -- no sixes necessary: this one was kinda tough to write but not personal in my current life..... been married to the hubby for nearly 30 years and even though there are times I've wanted to bonk him on the head, we've never even been close to here! ;) :) Thanx for the review, Beautiful Lady D -- take care! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Powerful! Beautifully written and heartbreaking! What bothers me the most is that the other woman Shirley must know that there are children depending on that person. How can someone live with themselves knowing that those children's hearts are going to be ripped from their chest. Adults can heal and move on the children never heal from the splitting of a family! This is a superb writing! xoxo
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Powerful! Beautifully written and heartbreaking! What bothers me the most is that the other woman Shirley must know that there are children depending on that person. How can someone live with themselves knowing that those children's hearts are going to be ripped from their chest. Adults can heal and move on the children never heal from the splitting of a family! This is a superb writing! xoxo
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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It was a difficult write -- Thank you for such a wonderful review.
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I am sure of that! :( xoxo
Comment from Dawn Munro
I have never been able to understand what can make someone cheat, especially when they've been together with a spouse long enough to build a family like the one described herein. And what a description of emotions too -- too real! Excellent!!!
Best of luck in the booth.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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I have never been able to understand what can make someone cheat, especially when they've been together with a spouse long enough to build a family like the one described herein. And what a description of emotions too -- too real! Excellent!!!
Best of luck in the booth.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your review. ;-)
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
There can be no greater betrayal. Your poem depicts what many a woman faces and suffers, too often. As the title says "I Can't Do This Anymore" yes enough is enough. You composed a very apt poem that covers so much of the dilemma that people go through. A wonderful job. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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There can be no greater betrayal. Your poem depicts what many a woman faces and suffers, too often. As the title says "I Can't Do This Anymore" yes enough is enough. You composed a very apt poem that covers so much of the dilemma that people go through. A wonderful job. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review!