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Aaron's Dragons

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An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs

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Comment from Kathleen S.
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It's enjoyable read. Your descriptive with your words and tell your story well. It reminds me a bit of the "Eragon series." I wonder if that's where you got your inspiration? Keep writing. :)

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
    Thanks. I haven't read that series. The inspiration was a dream I had.
reply by Kathleen S. on 01-Oct-2019
    That's super cool. I have read the entire series of Eragon. Inspiration from dreams are neat as well.
Comment from Sylvia Page
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This chapter was just beautiful. Aaron seemed to like what he was doing looking after the little baby dragons and caring for them equally even though the red guy was rather an angry and hungry dragon. I am wondering what the outcome would be when all have hatched. Aaron will have much on his hands.
Sylvia

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
    Thanks. Yep, the red one is a handful. Hope you will stay tuned and see what hatches.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Another beautiful chapter, I love how your hero is interacting with his babies dragons. Even if the red one is a little bit of trouble and wants to break the pink egg, he cares for all of them equally. Thank you for sharing. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I'm so glad you're still enjoying it. I just posted the next chapter.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed this chapter, Cindy. There is much action included in it. I like how the little dragons are being described in detail. That read one sure doesn't like the pink egg. It will be interesting to find out why. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love. Jan

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You referred to the container the red dragon was in as a pail and at times a jug. so, are there t containers--one for the water he pumped and the other for the one the red dragon is in?

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Aaron first put the water dragon into a pail, but then when he had to transoport him on horseback he searched around the kitchen for a jug and found one. He keeps a pail of water handy in case any more water dragons hatch.
Comment from Adri7enne
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'to tear a strip off OF him.' OFF stands for off of. So leave the second OF.
Your story is developing nicely.We get the feeling Aaron is going to have his hands full with his clutch of dragons. I'm enjoying how each dragon is different, with its own colors and personality. Fun little story. Well done, Cindy.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I'll fix that. Glad you're still enjoying the story.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This continues to be an interesting book. However, I hope that soon there will be some grouping to the dragons' hatchings, and not one full chapter devoted to each one. Otherwise it will become a bit of a list.
I love your choice of art work,a lot of thought has obviously gone into this.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Thanks. I hope I'm not giving too much away, but the pink dragon will help tie things together.
Comment from damommy
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He's must do something with the red one. She's going to be trouble. I can't help but love the little green and yellow fellow. It will be interesting watching him grow. Loving the story.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Thanks. Yep, the red one is feisty. Gotta keep things interesting. Glad you're still enjoying the story.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Cindy. When I read poetry or prose, in addition to the storyline I look for memorable lines or quotes that are powerful statements. I found the following one in this work. "Here real. There real. Different real." That struck me as easily explaining a character dealing with reality. Robert

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thanks. Aaron is dreaming of his dragon. He wants it to be real. Maybe its more real than he thinks.
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 27-Sep-2019
    You're welcome!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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Awe! Your descriptions of these little dragons are fascinating! Each sounds so beautiful! I am kind of liking the little firecracker! She sounds like a beautiful feisty one!! Each has such a different personality from the other! I can wait to read as they each come forth from their egg!!! xoxo

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thanks. These little dragons are proving to be a lot of fun.Glad you're enjoying
reply by Diana L Crawford on 27-Sep-2019
    I definitely am! xo
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Cindy Warren
I must say that you have written your story about the dargons, hatching easy to read and understand.

Now is the question what Arron is going to tame the Red dragon not to be so vicious.
Gert

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
    Thanks. That little red dragon seems to be a favorite. I thought I knew what to do with her, but it seems I'm going to have to come up with something else.
reply by Gert sherwood on 27-Sep-2019
    Hi Cindy you are welcome
    Who knows what the cute Red dragon could change herself to be a friendly dragon.
    Gert