Comment from Blue Hendrix

Excellent

Love the imagery here it is so real it gave me chills just thinking about it. I really enjoyed reading this piece. We write about alot of similar topics lol but I have been reading more of your collection today and I'm really impressed great job!

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019

Thanks for your positive review. Getting the chills from a burning bed is a weird reaction isn't it!! (I know what you mean). I am flattered that you have been checking out my writing - I've noticed yours from time to time and we do seem to be 'on the same page'. You use powerful imagery to describe sentiments too. Thanks for your compliment.

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello Mystery Writer!
Kudos for your creativity and message!
And Kudos to me for having read your well-crafted poetic offering and understanding it! Now...that is NOT a criticism; I love it. But sometimes, it takes me two or three times to get the gist of an offering...and I even taught sociology for eons...which should have made me get the reference to "burning bed" right away! Love the symbolism of a "clean sheet."
Best Wishes!
Keep writing!

diane

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thanks for your explanatory review. I think most poets hope they have expressed themselves well enough to be understood (unless they are purposely trying to be obscure), but 'getting it' will always come down to the reader's own background, experience or knowledge.

reply by Mrs. KT on 27-Sep-2019

Well, it's a wonderful poem, and I truly appreciated it.

diane

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Naani about the lies we tell can follow us into our beds at night and set the bed on fire so that we are unable to sleep while we worry about all the lies we told.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thanks for your assessment of my poem. A burning bed must be rather uncomfortable - if he can't stand the heat, he should get out of bed!

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Hello mystery writer. The picture of the bed on fire certainly got my attention right away. The metaphor of a man in a burning bed does express a certain urgency. Good luck in the contest. Robert

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thanks for your comments, Robert. I appreciate your feedback. That burning bed of lies is going to get hotter I feel.

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 27-Sep-2019

You're welcome.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a shocking image! If it is left to men I doubt the sheet would ever be changed! But I liked the metaphor here and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Haha... they don't seem to notice do they?
Thanks for your review, Dolly.

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

This is a most interesting symbolic poem. I felt like you mixed the metaphors a bit, with a burning bed and then needing clean sheets. (Seems like you'd need a new bed!) I loved the idea of a clean sheet after the truth is "soiled" and twisted, but perhaps rather than burning, you could have used a soiled or wrinkled bed?? I don't know... I just think you've begun something wonderful, and perhaps could make it better. I truly love the idea behind this. Good luck in the contest. MM

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thanks for reviewing.
I added this comment in the author's note to bring readers' attention to parallels in current politics: When lies are involved in a hotbed of intrigue, our domestic equanimity is threatened and we need a new start.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

This is a very well written short poem, as our political enviroment needs a clean sheet as now we seem to be burning resting place, very well done with great artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

I am pleased you get the metaphor... it is confusing others. Some people are so literal. And that may be the problem of our age - either they lack imagination, or they have too much of it and invent things.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

I have known a few people whom I considered to be lacking a conscience. How do they sleep at night? Probably quite well--because they have no conscience and feel no need to "change their sheets." Your poem is very well-written and thought-provoking.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thanks for your review. Those without a conscience get away with far too much. They leave all the fretting and stressing to us.

Comment from Susan X Smith

Excellent

This is a style of poetry with which I was not previously familiar. The picture is certainly riveting and it adds to the atmosphere of the words. I especially like the last two lines. It could apply to our political situation.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019

Thanks for your review. I had never met a naani poem before I saw this contest, so this is my first one. Part of the suggested requirement for the subject is "Generally it depends upon human relations and current statements", so well spotted, for it is indeed about the political situation. Or any man who lies and expects to get away with it.

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

In this poem shows why some men lie. They get punished. I like this poem. Well written! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest! Excellent work!

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019

Thanks very much for your kind words and good wishes.

reply by Raul1 on 26-Sep-2019

You're welcome.