Comment from beizanten

Excellent

An interesting title and even more interesting picture, it suit the poetry. A well written first stanza. Even more interesting and questioning second stanza. a good third an fourth stanza

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019

Thank you for your time to review of this poem offering. Bless you for the Compliments.

Comment from Gypsymooncat

Good

Look, I can appreciate what you're trying to achieve with this poem, but I honestly couldn't get my head around the capitalisation of most of the words in it, even after reading your notes.

I'm a bit grey also on the point you're wanting to make here - which to me came across as doing good deeds to others is living justly - but in truth, the use of too many big words, along with that capitalisation, detracted from the message of your work, which is a real shame because I think, written in another style, this could be an excellent poem, if not exceptional.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019

Thank you for the time to read and review this poem offering. Blessings to you.