Childhood Memories
Disney Parks and Universal Studios Parks.27 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This sounds like a lot of fun, my friend. I find the rides scary. I would work on this a bit to avoid using I as the first word of almost every sentence. Example:
I went to MGM Studios theme park. I saw the Indiana Jones adventure. I met Disney characters. The best thing that happened to me, was when I first met Mickey Mouse for the first time. I was only eight years old at the time. I went inside the Cinderella castle and had fun sightseeing inside the place.
At the MGM Studios, I saw Indiana Jones and met several Disney characters. The most exciting was meeting my favorite character, Mickey Mouse when I was eight year sold. Sight-seeing inside the Cinderella castle was a wonderful adventure.
I hope this is helpful. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
This sounds like a lot of fun, my friend. I find the rides scary. I would work on this a bit to avoid using I as the first word of almost every sentence. Example:
I went to MGM Studios theme park. I saw the Indiana Jones adventure. I met Disney characters. The best thing that happened to me, was when I first met Mickey Mouse for the first time. I was only eight years old at the time. I went inside the Cinderella castle and had fun sightseeing inside the place.
At the MGM Studios, I saw Indiana Jones and met several Disney characters. The most exciting was meeting my favorite character, Mickey Mouse when I was eight year sold. Sight-seeing inside the Cinderella castle was a wonderful adventure.
I hope this is helpful. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
As a child, having all thatfun and excitement, you would never have imagined that as an adult yould hear of Disney Corporationn facing lawsuits and the like
As for the several others you attended, environmental struggles visit them too.
Youee story puts a face con tourist sites.
Don
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
As a child, having all thatfun and excitement, you would never have imagined that as an adult yould hear of Disney Corporationn facing lawsuits and the like
As for the several others you attended, environmental struggles visit them too.
Youee story puts a face con tourist sites.
Don
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from brenda faye curtis
It's amazing how an experience like this can help you recall all the good things about being a child, how your innocence allowed you to believe that anything was possible. Yours is a good story that helped this reader recall some of her own childhood.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
It's amazing how an experience like this can help you recall all the good things about being a child, how your innocence allowed you to believe that anything was possible. Yours is a good story that helped this reader recall some of her own childhood.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my essay!
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I did!
Comment from LisaMay
I enjoyed your story very much because I have never been to Disneyland or experienced any of the rides or theme parks you mention here. I can see why you enjoyed them so much when you were a kid. I think I would still enjoy going there even though I am a grown-up now, I am a kid inside.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
I enjoyed your story very much because I have never been to Disneyland or experienced any of the rides or theme parks you mention here. I can see why you enjoyed them so much when you were a kid. I think I would still enjoy going there even though I am a grown-up now, I am a kid inside.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed my essay!
Comment from Joan E.
I live in Southern California and my son works for the Disney Studios--so, I am glad you have fond memories of theme parks. Thanks for introducing me to "Figment the dragon" as well and adding the memorable picture. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
I live in Southern California and my son works for the Disney Studios--so, I am glad you have fond memories of theme parks. Thanks for introducing me to "Figment the dragon" as well and adding the memorable picture. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I have won third place in the contest! I'm glad you enjoyed my essay!
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Congratulations on having your essay so well received. Happy weekend- Joan
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Thank you! :)
Comment from RodG
I know people who go to Disney World every year. You appear to have gone often and tell us all the rides you liked. Maybe you could focus more on ONE key adventure that was the "time of your life."
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
I know people who go to Disney World every year. You appear to have gone often and tell us all the rides you liked. Maybe you could focus more on ONE key adventure that was the "time of your life."
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Susan Larson
It's fun reminiscing about our favorite childhood memories and it sounds like you have many. This essay would be more engaging if fewer sentences began with I. Otherwise, nice essay.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
It's fun reminiscing about our favorite childhood memories and it sounds like you have many. This essay would be more engaging if fewer sentences began with I. Otherwise, nice essay.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my essay!
Comment from tfawcus
You seem to have a bunch of happy memories here of various theme parks. There is a thrill in the adventure of them that remains with one in memory long after the event. The specific detail in your account adds interest for the reader.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
You seem to have a bunch of happy memories here of various theme parks. There is a thrill in the adventure of them that remains with one in memory long after the event. The specific detail in your account adds interest for the reader.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Sallyo
This is the kind of thing Tasmanians don't experience so it's interesting to read about it from someone who did. I learned a few things all right and now have a better understanding of what theme parks are all about.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
This is the kind of thing Tasmanians don't experience so it's interesting to read about it from someone who did. I learned a few things all right and now have a better understanding of what theme parks are all about.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you, my friend! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. Although I enjoyed reading what you have written, I think it would come across better if your sentences did not all begin with I. It takes the "story" element out of it.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your story. Although I enjoyed reading what you have written, I think it would come across better if your sentences did not all begin with I. It takes the "story" element out of it.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you! Thanks for the Advice. I'm so happy that you enjoyed my essay!