The Lighter Side of Things
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Teeth Like Stars"We all need to smile, especially these days.
10 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is well-written, vividly detailed, and entertaining. And the situation it describes would be funny to anyone except the one searching for her teeth!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Your poem is well-written, vividly detailed, and entertaining. And the situation it describes would be funny to anyone except the one searching for her teeth!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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She rarely saw the funny side of it. Can't for the life of me figure out why...lol! Thanks for your lovely review Janice xoxoxoxo
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is good and very funny gypsymooncat! I'll bet that your mother gave you guys a good thrashing for playing with her teeth. I like the descriptive and well thought out wording you've used in this well written loop. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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This is good and very funny gypsymooncat! I'll bet that your mother gave you guys a good thrashing for playing with her teeth. I like the descriptive and well thought out wording you've used in this well written loop. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much Jeffrey! It is a fine thing for me when someone enjoys what I write xoxoxoxo
Comment from Dawn Munro
AaaaaaaaaaaaaaaHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! OMG. This is a poetry format that I find a challenge, and I write some that others think are THE most challenging (the Crown, for example). But you have used it admirably well, each line flowing into the next as if there was no requirement of repetition, it just worked. Your meter, too, is flawless. I LOVE this! (If this does not win the contest, I sure want to read what does!)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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AaaaaaaaaaaaaaaHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! OMG. This is a poetry format that I find a challenge, and I write some that others think are THE most challenging (the Crown, for example). But you have used it admirably well, each line flowing into the next as if there was no requirement of repetition, it just worked. Your meter, too, is flawless. I LOVE this! (If this does not win the contest, I sure want to read what does!)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Well thank you for such encouraging comments! This is my first go at a loop poem, after researching the form online and reading other examples of it.
So I'm feeling emboldened by your praise and hope my entry does well! Thanks again xoxo
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from lyenochka
What a great loop poem that makes sense and the looping is consistent and doesn't affect the flow of meter or meaning. And it's humorous and cute! Best wishes in the contest!!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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What a great loop poem that makes sense and the looping is consistent and doesn't affect the flow of meter or meaning. And it's humorous and cute! Best wishes in the contest!!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much lyenochka, I'm glad you enjoyed this! xoxoxo
Comment from Cheryl I
I love the poem but it is supposed to have a rhyme scheme according to the requirements. You started off with one in the first stanza, and then stopped. Other than that, it is just a delightful poem and a lot of fun.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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I love the poem but it is supposed to have a rhyme scheme according to the requirements. You started off with one in the first stanza, and then stopped. Other than that, it is just a delightful poem and a lot of fun.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you for pointing that out! I went back and checked the contest requirements, and you're dead right - it is an abcb rhyme scheme. I have adjusted it, and am very grateful you spotted that and mentioned it. Blessings to you! xoxoxoxox
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, this made me laugh! Your poor Mum having to look for her teeth! Of course in those days they pulled teeth out rather than save them! Your loop is full of fun and I enjoyed every word, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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He he he, this made me laugh! Your poor Mum having to look for her teeth! Of course in those days they pulled teeth out rather than save them! Your loop is full of fun and I enjoyed every word, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Hey thanks Dolly, so glad you enjoyed my first attempt at a loop!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a respectable entry for the Loop contest which also rhymes. It is humorous with a picture to match. Poor mama, always in search of her false teeth. I'd say she would get irritated often! Nice job.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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This is a respectable entry for the Loop contest which also rhymes. It is humorous with a picture to match. Poor mama, always in search of her false teeth. I'd say she would get irritated often! Nice job.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thanks Susan, yep, she did get upset lol. Oh well...at least she got her teeth back at dinner time!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You hid your mom's set of teeth at new places everyday and enjoyed the fun doing the mischief, seeing how your mother searched them everywhere; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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You hid your mom's set of teeth at new places everyday and enjoyed the fun doing the mischief, seeing how your mother searched them everywhere; well said, well done.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thanks Alcreator! xoxo
Comment from Patty Palmer
LOL I can just see it. You bad bad girls! LOL How did she eat if she couldn't find her teeth? Poor lady. I have choppers too and I would be so embarrassed to have to leave the house without them. Did you give them to he for meals? I am sitting her laughing my butt off. Well, needless to say I like your poem.
God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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LOL I can just see it. You bad bad girls! LOL How did she eat if she couldn't find her teeth? Poor lady. I have choppers too and I would be so embarrassed to have to leave the house without them. Did you give them to he for meals? I am sitting her laughing my butt off. Well, needless to say I like your poem.
God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you Patty! And yeah, we gave em back so she could eat, but watching her run round the house toothless was PRICELESS, albeit a bit mean lol
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You're welcome@
Comment from LisaMay
Oh you ratbag kids! Poor mother... as if life isn't tough enough. Funny though. How did she eat? Fancy being responsible for starving your mum to death. Your poem is a welcome touch of humour - too many people take poetry so seriously.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Oh you ratbag kids! Poor mother... as if life isn't tough enough. Funny though. How did she eat? Fancy being responsible for starving your mum to death. Your poem is a welcome touch of humour - too many people take poetry so seriously.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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We let her eat...after all, she cooked lol!
Thanks for a great review xoxoxox
