Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "Bow Thrusters"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Aiona--and a humorous take off on the theme from 'Ghostbusters,' I started to get sea sick just reading this, I felt the wind in my face and felt the sea spray on my face!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Another fine poem, Aiona--and a humorous take off on the theme from 'Ghostbusters,' I started to get sea sick just reading this, I felt the wind in my face and felt the sea spray on my face!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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LOL! Thanks, Mike.
Comment from Halfree
Read you a lot, enjoy your postings... but this-un took me nowhere. To fully appreciate this posting, I would have to know something about sailing and boats...I know zilch.
But keep at it, this posting does not reflect your talent ...well that's one man's opinion.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Read you a lot, enjoy your postings... but this-un took me nowhere. To fully appreciate this posting, I would have to know something about sailing and boats...I know zilch.
But keep at it, this posting does not reflect your talent ...well that's one man's opinion.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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LOL! Thanks, Halfree!
Comment from Cindy Warren
I've never heard of bow thrusters, but I got a kick out of the poem. It gave me a smile, even tho I don't see a lot of sailboats in landlocked Edmonton. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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I've never heard of bow thrusters, but I got a kick out of the poem. It gave me a smile, even tho I don't see a lot of sailboats in landlocked Edmonton. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thanks!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You draw the reader in to immediately do more research on what bow thrusters are, what they are used for and what they look like. Once we did that we could settle in to enjoy your poem. This would make an excellent ad for BOW THRUSTERS. I like the cheering tone. I prefer to read poetry and parts of prose aloud. I found myself prediction when to do the fist up gesture as I said the words BOW THRUSTERS. This has a tone of humor. It is very entertaining.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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You draw the reader in to immediately do more research on what bow thrusters are, what they are used for and what they look like. Once we did that we could settle in to enjoy your poem. This would make an excellent ad for BOW THRUSTERS. I like the cheering tone. I prefer to read poetry and parts of prose aloud. I found myself prediction when to do the fist up gesture as I said the words BOW THRUSTERS. This has a tone of humor. It is very entertaining.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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LOL! Thanks.
Comment from LisaMay
I don't know much about maritime matters - is this an argument of vanity between the purists and the practical? It makes perfect sense to use something to make life easier. It's a bit like the old geezer who keeps falling over rather than have people think he needs to use a cane. Common sense should prevail, yet people are resistant to it.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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I don't know much about maritime matters - is this an argument of vanity between the purists and the practical? It makes perfect sense to use something to make life easier. It's a bit like the old geezer who keeps falling over rather than have people think he needs to use a cane. Common sense should prevail, yet people are resistant to it.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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LOL! Exactly!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This definitely borders on a parody of pop song lyrics with 'bow thrusters' and "Ghostbusters" sounding so much like fraternal twins. I like the first stanza the best when it comes to creating a parody-like tone. My memory is a little rusty on the rest. Good half rhyme of 'wuss' and 'thrust.' Thanks for sharing! (Author notes, I think you mean 'lose' and not 'loose.')
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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This definitely borders on a parody of pop song lyrics with 'bow thrusters' and "Ghostbusters" sounding so much like fraternal twins. I like the first stanza the best when it comes to creating a parody-like tone. My memory is a little rusty on the rest. Good half rhyme of 'wuss' and 'thrust.' Thanks for sharing! (Author notes, I think you mean 'lose' and not 'loose.')
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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You too? Yeah, I couldn't help hearing it when I wrote it.