A Ghostly Tale
Legend has it.12 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well told eerie Halloween story. It tells of hauntings that happen only on this night. I bet no one goes near their on Halloween much. At least not near enough for the dead bloody bride to see. Maybe if some one could get them to pass over to the other side, they would be together forever.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
~dragonpoet
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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This is a well told eerie Halloween story. It tells of hauntings that happen only on this night. I bet no one goes near their on Halloween much. At least not near enough for the dead bloody bride to see. Maybe if some one could get them to pass over to the other side, they would be together forever.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
~dragonpoet
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much. :)
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You are most kindly welcome.
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You are most kindly welcome.
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Comment from fluffnstuff
There you go again lady. A great rhymer and I really enjoyed reading it. This is a winner for sure. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx fluff
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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There you go again lady. A great rhymer and I really enjoyed reading it. This is a winner for sure. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx fluff
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for those wonderful 6 stars. Its such an honor.
Comment from AprilViolet
You never cease to blow me away with your poems! Exceptionally written and well thought out. I can see the scene playing out in my head as I read it and that is a sign of a great poet!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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You never cease to blow me away with your poems! Exceptionally written and well thought out. I can see the scene playing out in my head as I read it and that is a sign of a great poet!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2019
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You are awesome! Thank you so much for this fantastic review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written scary poem about a certain event that seems to occur on Halloween nights to show the tragic death of a bride and groom to be, still waiting for the ceremony to give their vows.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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A very well-written scary poem about a certain event that seems to occur on Halloween nights to show the tragic death of a bride and groom to be, still waiting for the ceremony to give their vows.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem...its very appreciated.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Absolutely loved this Halloween poem, beautifully written with a lovely smooth flow.
Super lines that give an excellent eerie feel to your words.
Loved it
Mitchell
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Absolutely loved this Halloween poem, beautifully written with a lovely smooth flow.
Super lines that give an excellent eerie feel to your words.
Loved it
Mitchell
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you! It means a lot to me, that you like it so much. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is indeed a ghostly and eerie tale and I enjoyed your horror within. I do have a couple of suggestions for you for the sake of meter to improve the flow:
Second line:
"The veil becomes thin"
Change to "the veil becoming thin"
"On Halloween though, the curtain is pulled,"
Change to "on Halloween, with curtain pulled"
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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This is indeed a ghostly and eerie tale and I enjoyed your horror within. I do have a couple of suggestions for you for the sake of meter to improve the flow:
Second line:
"The veil becomes thin"
Change to "the veil becoming thin"
"On Halloween though, the curtain is pulled,"
Change to "on Halloween, with curtain pulled"
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you for reading and for the excellent suggestions. It's all appreciated.
Comment from country ranch writer
A sad tale entwined in disaster and a love that can never be. They are killed by another never to be able say those words everyone wants to hear.Spirts look on watching and waiting.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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A sad tale entwined in disaster and a love that can never be. They are killed by another never to be able say those words everyone wants to hear.Spirts look on watching and waiting.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for those stellar six stars. Its so kind of you, and made my day!
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's creepy. I think I'll be staying away from that house. I don't want her pointing toward me! I like the part about the lady in white playing tunes. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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That's creepy. I think I'll be staying away from that house. I don't want her pointing toward me! I like the part about the lady in white playing tunes. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Hahahaha! I deliver a paper to that mansion everyday. Hope i don't ever see anything! Thank you for this nice review. :)
Comment from Susan X Smith
This was a well-written poem with a well-chosen image to match. It truly sets a macabre atmosphere. There is an aura of mystery because we are told just enough - that there was a jealous lover involved in their deaths - but not too much. Good luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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This was a well-written poem with a well-chosen image to match. It truly sets a macabre atmosphere. There is an aura of mystery because we are told just enough - that there was a jealous lover involved in their deaths - but not too much. Good luck in the voting.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Sallyo
Well done on using the prompt! This is a suitably eerie and original story in verse for the season. Just one thing; pictures are hung, people are hanged. If wouldn't make a difference to the meter.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Well done on using the prompt! This is a suitably eerie and original story in verse for the season. Just one thing; pictures are hung, people are hanged. If wouldn't make a difference to the meter.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2019
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Thank you for that advice....i didn't know. I appreciate this very nice and helpful review.
