Deception
A husband's will38 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a real pearl of a story. Totally unexpected for the reader as well as for Evelyn, although perhaps less of a shock. Will Evelyn contest the will? It's a shame there is no more space to find out. But this is the joy of flash fiction.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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This is a real pearl of a story. Totally unexpected for the reader as well as for Evelyn, although perhaps less of a shock. Will Evelyn contest the will? It's a shame there is no more space to find out. But this is the joy of flash fiction.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Katherine, for the awesome review. You know Evelyn will try to contest the will but shall find it can't be done lol.
God bless
Steve
Comment from DonandVicki
Now that is unconditional love and being able to stick it to the deceiving wife to boot. A quick and to the point short, short story. Very clever and Imaginative. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Now that is unconditional love and being able to stick it to the deceiving wife to boot. A quick and to the point short, short story. Very clever and Imaginative. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the awesome review. I enjoyed crafting this one.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Neonewman. This is a very well conceived and written stories. It is a complete narrative in 80 words. My favorite line in the work is the last. She wanted money, not redemption, but she got the latter. Robert
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Hello Neonewman. This is a very well conceived and written stories. It is a complete narrative in 80 words. My favorite line in the work is the last. She wanted money, not redemption, but she got the latter. Robert
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Right! Thank you, Robert. I enjoyed the excellent review and appreciate it much.
God bless
Steve
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You're welcome!
Comment from Coco Jane
Oh, nice turnabout here! Not at all what we expect from marriage or from a funeral.
Maybe instead of "What?" Evelyn can repeat the "Why?" of her funeral act--only this time it's sincere.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Oh, nice turnabout here! Not at all what we expect from marriage or from a funeral.
Maybe instead of "What?" Evelyn can repeat the "Why?" of her funeral act--only this time it's sincere.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the awesome review, my friend. I love the suggestions. Not sure about changing them once entered.
God bless
Steve
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You can edit an entry right up until the contest closes.
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Awesome! I didn't know that. I did change the last what to why. Thank you.
Comment from Lobber
Hi there,
A delight to read... a concise use of words with a wonderful twist at the end.. justice well served..of that we all could be so forgiving- Lobber
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Hi there,
A delight to read... a concise use of words with a wonderful twist at the end.. justice well served..of that we all could be so forgiving- Lobber
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Wow! I am happy to see this little piece so well received. Than you for the awesome six-star review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You packed a great little story into your eighty words. Delivering the one-two-three punch via the attorney's reading of the will was masterful.
Bravo!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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You packed a great little story into your eighty words. Delivering the one-two-three punch via the attorney's reading of the will was masterful.
Bravo!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Janice, for this excellent review. I enjoyed the challenge and love that it is so well received.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Tpa
Great ending, superbly done. You captivated a wonderful story with a limited amount of words. Your text need no improvement. WISHING YOU MUCH SUCCESS IN THE CONTEST
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Great ending, superbly done. You captivated a wonderful story with a limited amount of words. Your text need no improvement. WISHING YOU MUCH SUCCESS IN THE CONTEST
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Tpa, for the awesome review. What fun I had crafting this little one. If I were to win, it would be a first for a contest such as this. Thank you for the encouraging words.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Oh my, the proverbial gold digger...well she received something valuable in the end, forgiveness.
This is a flash story with a good twist and I totally enjoyed it.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Oh my, the proverbial gold digger...well she received something valuable in the end, forgiveness.
This is a flash story with a good twist and I totally enjoyed it.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Sandra, for taking the time to review and for the wonderful stars.
God bless
Steve
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You are welcome, Steve.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Wow! This is a small masterpiece! The ending is PERFECT. Such an imaginative idea... sure wish I had thought of it. So far in the contest, this is the best entry I've seen. Hope you win. :)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Wow! This is a small masterpiece! The ending is PERFECT. Such an imaginative idea... sure wish I had thought of it. So far in the contest, this is the best entry I've seen. Hope you win. :)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Phyllis, thank you. Wow! I am stoked at all the wonderful reviews and six stars this piece has received. I certainly enjoyed the challenge.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
And they say that the dead tell no tales! Hah! Way to go, husband!
A fine story told in the 80-word parameters.
If I may add one suggestion, it would be at the very ending:
To my cheating wife, Evelyn, I leave the greatest treasure of all: my forgiveness
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer!
And they say that the dead tell no tales! Hah! Way to go, husband!
A fine story told in the 80-word parameters.
If I may add one suggestion, it would be at the very ending:
To my cheating wife, Evelyn, I leave the greatest treasure of all: my forgiveness
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Diane, for the awesome and insightful review. Not sure if it's allowed to alter after entry has been submitted. Great suggestion.
God bless
Steve
