I Don't Love you
husband and wife conversation.18 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
Happy 50th wedding anniversary. What a wonderful way to say...
"I never said that. I said that I don't love you anymore I did not say I love you any less.
"Darling!" "I love you too."
Separate, divorce what? (comma required after separate)
Best
Sylvia
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Happy 50th wedding anniversary. What a wonderful way to say...
"I never said that. I said that I don't love you anymore I did not say I love you any less.
"Darling!" "I love you too."
Separate, divorce what? (comma required after separate)
Best
Sylvia
Comment Written 17-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Sorry for the delay in response my computer went on vacation went on the power cord did not.()Thank you for the Happy Anniversary.() Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Rikki
Comment from shaffer40
This is a clever play-on-words story that fools the reader into thinking it's a sad end to a relationship. People happily married a long time will especially get a kick out of it. I just noticed one little thing:
Punctuation missing at end of this quote:
"No! I said I don't love you anymore. I mean that I do not love you anymore
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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This is a clever play-on-words story that fools the reader into thinking it's a sad end to a relationship. People happily married a long time will especially get a kick out of it. I just noticed one little thing:
Punctuation missing at end of this quote:
"No! I said I don't love you anymore. I mean that I do not love you anymore
Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Sorry for the delay in response my computer went on vacation the power cord did not () Thank you for reading and reviewing. () I aim to please.
Rikki
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You're quite welcome. Funny how you describe your computer woes, much like your prose.
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You are truly welcome.
Comment from Susan Morritt
I read this dialogue story with interest at first, then wondered, is there a point to this? The main story line is very cliched, and has been used innumerable times. If you wanted to write a story about your anniversary or the love you have for your wife, make it original. Sorry.
Susan
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I read this dialogue story with interest at first, then wondered, is there a point to this? The main story line is very cliched, and has been used innumerable times. If you wanted to write a story about your anniversary or the love you have for your wife, make it original. Sorry.
Susan
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Sorry for response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () The point is I had fun hoping others would too. Thank you for reading and speaking your mind.
Rikki
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I apologize for being so abrupt. I hope I didn't hurt your feelings. It was rather insensitive of me. Sorry.
Susan
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Any review is a welcome review for it means you read my story.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a hilarious conversation. If the guy was my husband, I'd probably kill him though...
I think there's a comma missing: Separate (,) divorce
Great post. Thanks.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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This is a hilarious conversation. If the guy was my husband, I'd probably kill him though...
I think there's a comma missing: Separate (,) divorce
Great post. Thanks.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I am sorry for the delay in response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () Glad you liked my effort don't kill the husband he was just having fun. () Thanks
Rikki
Comment from Scarbrems
Yeah, maybe he should have kept his mouth shut, lol. A fun dialogue piece revealing how even two people who've loved eachother a long time can still have misunderstandings. The sentiment here, though, is lovely, even though he mucks up expressing it at the start.
I mean that I do not love you anymore - need to close quotes at the end of this line.
Congratulations on 50 years of marriage.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Yeah, maybe he should have kept his mouth shut, lol. A fun dialogue piece revealing how even two people who've loved eachother a long time can still have misunderstandings. The sentiment here, though, is lovely, even though he mucks up expressing it at the start.
I mean that I do not love you anymore - need to close quotes at the end of this line.
Congratulations on 50 years of marriage.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I am sorry for response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. () I had fun writing it.
Rikki
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a quirky conversation. Wise husband to hold his tongue on this one. I find the wife very charming. She has a valid point although I tell my grandchildren that I love them more everyday. She may be right though. My heart was full of love when I first saw them.
I enjoyed this piece very much.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a quirky conversation. Wise husband to hold his tongue on this one. I find the wife very charming. She has a valid point although I tell my grandchildren that I love them more everyday. She may be right though. My heart was full of love when I first saw them.
I enjoyed this piece very much.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I sorrow at my response time my compute went on vacation the power cord did not. () Thank you for reading and reviewing. () My wife is very charming.
Rikki
Comment from marion
Hi there
I think your point was well made - LOL! I coudln't help but chuckle at the end!
I have dropped a star because the punctuation needs fixing. I have given you some examples below.
I enjoyed.
"No!(") I said(,) (")I don't love you anymore. I mean that I do not love you anymore(.)(")
Separate divorce what? (")
you any less.(")
"Darling!" (")I love you too."
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Hi there
I think your point was well made - LOL! I coudln't help but chuckle at the end!
I have dropped a star because the punctuation needs fixing. I have given you some examples below.
I enjoyed.
"No!(") I said(,) (")I don't love you anymore. I mean that I do not love you anymore(.)(")
Separate divorce what? (")
you any less.(")
"Darling!" (")I love you too."
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I sorrow at response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () Thank you for reading and reviewing. () Blame Grammarly for punctuation I do.
Rikki
Comment from lyenochka
He's not a Cyrano or a Romeo with words! Lol. He really should say, "I couldn't love you any more."
Some comments:
"Bastard?" (Did you mean to have a question mark here? I thought an exclamation point might be better.)
"Darling!" "I love you too." ("Darling! I love you too."
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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He's not a Cyrano or a Romeo with words! Lol. He really should say, "I couldn't love you any more."
Some comments:
"Bastard?" (Did you mean to have a question mark here? I thought an exclamation point might be better.)
"Darling!" "I love you too." ("Darling! I love you too."
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I sorrow at my response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () Thank you for reading my work. () He is no great lover just a duffer.
Rikki
Comment from Susan Larson
What a delightful play on the English language, one that is so often vulnerable to misinterpretation. I read it twice. Very clever. I love it, but not anymore than when I read it the first time.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a delightful play on the English language, one that is so often vulnerable to misinterpretation. I read it twice. Very clever. I love it, but not anymore than when I read it the first time.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Sorry for the response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () Thank you for reading my work glad you enjoyed.
Rikki
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a fun 'play on words' conversation, Rikki -- I can easily picture an older couple having this conversation, no problem!! ;) :) Great warming smile for the day -- thanx for sharing! ;)
not love you anymore --> not love you any more."
of our life I loved --> of our lives I've loved
Separate divorce what? --> Separate? Divorce? What?"
you anymore I did not say --> you any more - I did not say [or a period there would work]
"Darling!" "I love you --> "Darling! I love you
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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What a fun 'play on words' conversation, Rikki -- I can easily picture an older couple having this conversation, no problem!! ;) :) Great warming smile for the day -- thanx for sharing! ;)
not love you anymore --> not love you any more."
of our life I loved --> of our lives I've loved
Separate divorce what? --> Separate? Divorce? What?"
you anymore I did not say --> you any more - I did not say [or a period there would work]
"Darling!" "I love you --> "Darling! I love you
Comment Written 13-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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My sorrow at the response time my computer went on vacation the power cord did not. () Thank you for reading and the excellent review.
Rikki
