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A Book of Horror and Honor.

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Comment from Lulube
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Another version of your pain and sorrow that spills onto the paper, as you write and explain that horrific night when you lost your son. I very much like this technique you've used to write in. Bless you and your daughters.

lulube

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 14-Sep-2019
    Thanks again,
    Lulube.
    Ricky
reply by Lulube on 14-Sep-2019
    welcome

    lulube
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is yet another powerful narrative on that fateful day when the decision was made. There are really good lines in each of the many versions you have posted, perhaps you should attempt to take the best of each and make one single account that will speak powerfully to the reader. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
    Thanks Mystic Angel,
    When I go back relive that horrible event.
    And, journal that there's many reasons.
    ...
    First to honor my son Jason.
    Next to honor my wife Carolyn.
    Next to teach and educate people on organ tissue donation.
    And lastly for peace of mind.
    I've written this story probably about 200 to 250 x each time I write it I change it a teeny little bit or I'll remember something there's a lot of events I haven't included it was a complicated night.
    ...
    Example of when I was a teen to my son in the car I noticed there was a watch laying on the council I wasn't sure that was Brian's or Jason's but I left it.
    Has any events in folded a lot of people were taking notes notice.
    ...
    I later found out that there were other people that had witnessed it a house not far up the road.
    the woman said one of her twins sons about 16 sore what happened but she didn't want to get involved.
    ...
    There is also a lot of misinterpretations and lies on the police report.
    Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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It happened, all on a sudden, you were playing then, like Holy Crackel Batman, the life of your son gone, years later, your wife left, two hearts made you unfortunate; well said, well done.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
    Thanks again alcreator.
    Ricky