Food for the Needy
It can be a hard life in the streets.3 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Oh my god - how macabre! You've turned a couple of good deeds into a nightmarish death. This is so well written - picturing the scene, introducing the characters vividly in such a believable depiction that it has entirely put me off ever volunteering for a soup kitchen or helping a lady carry stuff to her place. I am done with being nice in case I end up as dinner!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
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Oh my god - how macabre! You've turned a couple of good deeds into a nightmarish death. This is so well written - picturing the scene, introducing the characters vividly in such a believable depiction that it has entirely put me off ever volunteering for a soup kitchen or helping a lady carry stuff to her place. I am done with being nice in case I end up as dinner!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
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How funny! Thanks for the review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Good job with this piece. Certainly fits the bill as far as the competition rules go. it's well written and the turn for the worse is satisfying, even if expected. good stuff
"That was very nice of you young man." - maybe a comma after you.
and the tart odor of sour wash cloths filled the room. - washcloths could be a single word here.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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Hi there,
Good job with this piece. Certainly fits the bill as far as the competition rules go. it's well written and the turn for the worse is satisfying, even if expected. good stuff
"That was very nice of you young man." - maybe a comma after you.
and the tart odor of sour wash cloths filled the room. - washcloths could be a single word here.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a complete story of mysterious mayhem in the word count allotted while effectively incorporating the specific words listed. This was actually pretty gross even if it did lack gore - beware those innocent looking old ladies LOL. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a complete story of mysterious mayhem in the word count allotted while effectively incorporating the specific words listed. This was actually pretty gross even if it did lack gore - beware those innocent looking old ladies LOL. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review.