Always Another Line
Don't try to find the words, let them find you...42 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette. I have come to dislike 5-7-5 poetry. My unsophisticated nature and lack of intellectual depth probably leads me there. Now that I'm finished, I like this one. It flows from the postulate in the first sentence to an action in the second sentence in the summary in the third. It's not just words. Z
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Hello Yvette. I have come to dislike 5-7-5 poetry. My unsophisticated nature and lack of intellectual depth probably leads me there. Now that I'm finished, I like this one. It flows from the postulate in the first sentence to an action in the second sentence in the summary in the third. It's not just words. Z
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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A serious LOL here, Z -- I really have no idea what you really look like, but after some back and forths and such, I have this image and that image with that statement REALLY tickled me!! ;) :) More than anything, I think it's because I agree with you on a number of levels....so many of these come out either choppy or vague or just weird as the authors try to put their thought out there in 17 syllables (or less!) and most of the time the readers just don't get it (and there's definitely no 'rhythm' to find since it's done practically before it starts!!)! ;) :) Thanx for that much needed smile after a long day of classes! And, yeah, thanx for the review and I'm glad this one at least passed muster with the Z-man! ;) :) Take care! ;) Yvette
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Hey Yvette. In 1983 a drunk in the bar at the Oklahoma City Airport asked me if I was Columbo. Since I was 6'3" and about 240, I knew he had been drinking. In my younger days people said I looked like Elliott Gould . It was probably the black wavy hair. I never saw it. You are one of the people that understands the way I write. I understand what I'm good at and I stick with that. It is "my voice." That's ballads (8686), free verse and limericks. My short stories are fables with a moral. You're one of the ones I follow here.
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Soooo.... a taller, better-looking Peter Faulk without so much squinty eyes and Elliot Gould's mischievous grin and DEFINITELY NOT married to Barbara Streisand.... I'll go with that for now!! ;) ;) LOL!
And I'm honored that you follow this nutty fantasy-leaning blonde... and I do consider myself in good company, Z, so thanx for that! ;) You keep writing your 'voice' and I'll keep reading it, sir -- take care! ;) Yvette
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Oh Yvette...just one more thing. LOLOLOLOLOL
My wife gave me a tee shirt that says., "I laugh at my own jokes." So did Red Skelton.
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the title it sings in truth when we begin writing sometimes we just keep adding from a poem to a story your words can grow in size very neatly put
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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from the title it sings in truth when we begin writing sometimes we just keep adding from a poem to a story your words can grow in size very neatly put
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, sir -- the 'shorties' are always a bit of a challenge, but somehow the muse usually comes through! ;) :) Thanx for the review -- much appreciated! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from zanya
Line two makes for a very compelling sentiment in this three line poem - nice touch of alliteration -has a hint of HAIKU here in line three - and such a good pic
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Line two makes for a very compelling sentiment in this three line poem - nice touch of alliteration -has a hint of HAIKU here in line three - and such a good pic
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thank you Zanya for the thoughtful review - very appreciate your stopping in today, ma'am! ;) :) Take care out there and enjoy the remainder of the week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Susan Larson
Your poem goes to show that no matter how fortunate, happy, sad or tragic a situation is, a writer can always get a story out of it, or in your case, a poem. ...as it sings songs to the poet's pen! What a wonderfully picturesque image!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Your poem goes to show that no matter how fortunate, happy, sad or tragic a situation is, a writer can always get a story out of it, or in your case, a poem. ...as it sings songs to the poet's pen! What a wonderfully picturesque image!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping by for the review on this one, Susan -- always so very good to hear from you! ;) Take care of you out there! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
There was a time when it was hard to write a line. I did not dream, Yvette. Then a light showed me the way and I dreamed. I'm here to stay... until my final dream. My thoughts will flow upon a river's stream and people will fill their cups and live, for they will dream.
See what your poem did to me? :) ;)
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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There was a time when it was hard to write a line. I did not dream, Yvette. Then a light showed me the way and I dreamed. I'm here to stay... until my final dream. My thoughts will flow upon a river's stream and people will fill their cups and live, for they will dream.
See what your poem did to me? :) ;)
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Hooray!! More inspired off-the-cuff rhymes from the Lone Star state!! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed this one, sir, and thanx so much for this AWESOME review! ;) Take care -- Yvette
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this excellent poem that conveys a great message in just a few words. That is very true that even shattered dreams can be dealt with creatively through the pen.
Bill
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanks for sharing this excellent poem that conveys a great message in just a few words. That is very true that even shattered dreams can be dealt with creatively through the pen.
Bill
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, Bill -- always so very appreciated! ;) Take care out there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a structurally sound 3 Line Poem. The content is beautifully executed and will resonate with many readers. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you deliver a structurally sound 3 Line Poem. The content is beautifully executed and will resonate with many readers. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for your review here, Angle -- always so good to hear your viewpoint! ;) Take care tomorrow! ;) Yvette
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is an unusual verse in that it points out the negative also has a positive possibility. I see 's' alliteration in 'sing' and 'songs.' There is 'p' alliteration in 'poet's' and 'pen." I like the color coordination going on. Not sure what to improve on. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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This is an unusual verse in that it points out the negative also has a positive possibility. I see 's' alliteration in 'sing' and 'songs.' There is 'p' alliteration in 'poet's' and 'pen." I like the color coordination going on. Not sure what to improve on. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for your wonderful and detailed review here, Crystie -- so very appreciated, ma'am! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janetsue
This is a wonderful entry in the three-line poem contest, Yvette. The message is great; love the line "sing songs to the poet's pen". The artwork is perfect and contributes to a pleasing balanced effect. xoxo Janet
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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This is a wonderful entry in the three-line poem contest, Yvette. The message is great; love the line "sing songs to the poet's pen". The artwork is perfect and contributes to a pleasing balanced effect. xoxo Janet
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for your uplifting review, Janet -- you always know just how to put a smile on my face! ;) Take care out there! ;) Yvette
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You're truly welcome, Yvette!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yvette,
Your post is a very fine combo of verse and artwork. Like your selected colors.
Alliteration abounds in middle line.
Terrific phrasing/imagery for: shattered dreams and fractured refrains.
Good luck in the voting.
Mark
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Yvette,
Your post is a very fine combo of verse and artwork. Like your selected colors.
Alliteration abounds in middle line.
Terrific phrasing/imagery for: shattered dreams and fractured refrains.
Good luck in the voting.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for your review here, Mark -- so very appreciated, sir! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
