The Fae Nation
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "A visit from the Ministry"Still just a germ of an idea that the moment
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A very enjoyable read. Please keep the chapters coming. I especially liked the high dialogue content. The bit I was less keen on was Bob's short fuse with the people from the Ministry. I have a feeling that a bar-tender should be more tolerant as he has to accept, pleasantly, all sorts of clients.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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A very enjoyable read. Please keep the chapters coming. I especially liked the high dialogue content. The bit I was less keen on was Bob's short fuse with the people from the Ministry. I have a feeling that a bar-tender should be more tolerant as he has to accept, pleasantly, all sorts of clients.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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The tension will, I hope, be explained in a later chapter. My parents had a pub. Dad could be a little intolerant at times. Thanks for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it
Comment from Adri7enne
Speaking of 'fairies', I think it's a brilliant way to show how prejudiced the world is, without insulting anyone's sensitivities. I love your description of Dawn: "She shivered and her wings spread, shimmering in the overhead lights." That's why I enjoy reading you so much. You're so subtle in your descriptions.
"Wilson treated the bar to a stare." The bar or bartender?
Okay! Just one round and I'll tell you what else I love about your stuff. Lol! Waiting for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Speaking of 'fairies', I think it's a brilliant way to show how prejudiced the world is, without insulting anyone's sensitivities. I love your description of Dawn: "She shivered and her wings spread, shimmering in the overhead lights." That's why I enjoy reading you so much. You're so subtle in your descriptions.
"Wilson treated the bar to a stare." The bar or bartender?
Okay! Just one round and I'll tell you what else I love about your stuff. Lol! Waiting for the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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It may be a cultural thing. The bar is the room in which people drink, so he was effectively looking around the room.
Yes, this is a story about prejudice and oppression. I've deliberately set it in the east end, because it has always been a home for minorities - the Irish, the Jews and then the Bangladeshis. This will come out later, I think.
Hmm, Bangladeshis. It's now known for it's curry houses. I wonder what sort of restaurants/cafes the fae would have...
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It's your created world, Bob. Go wild! Mushrooms with gold sauce! Something to dream about as you're lying in your lounger, having a beer. What fun, you lucky rig!
Comment from Hitcher
I think you captured the arrogant, aggressive coppers persona perfectly in this chapter. The visuals were excellent and the scene played out perfectly in the minds eye. It was very easy to read and enjoy , all in all a great little chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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I think you captured the arrogant, aggressive coppers persona perfectly in this chapter. The visuals were excellent and the scene played out perfectly in the minds eye. It was very easy to read and enjoy , all in all a great little chapter.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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You're very kind, thank you.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The charade against fae folks continues in this chapter too. The Minister wanting to teach the young Constable a lesson about how to treat people that are not human and frequents Bob's bar, it's deepening the verge of indignation for its kind even more :"Andrew here fancies himself as a comedian, because he thinks he's better than us. Yet he runs a pub for fairies. You think that makes him better than us, Constable Nunes?"
"No sir," said the constable.
"No sir, indeed. In my book that makes him pretty low. Makes you wonder what else he does with fairies."
"They're not fairies," said Bob. He glanced at the couple in the corner. "Well, they're mostly not. Civilised people prefer the term, 'fae'." Good read, thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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The charade against fae folks continues in this chapter too. The Minister wanting to teach the young Constable a lesson about how to treat people that are not human and frequents Bob's bar, it's deepening the verge of indignation for its kind even more :"Andrew here fancies himself as a comedian, because he thinks he's better than us. Yet he runs a pub for fairies. You think that makes him better than us, Constable Nunes?"
"No sir," said the constable.
"No sir, indeed. In my book that makes him pretty low. Makes you wonder what else he does with fairies."
"They're not fairies," said Bob. He glanced at the couple in the corner. "Well, they're mostly not. Civilised people prefer the term, 'fae'." Good read, thank you for sharing
Comment Written 03-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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No, thank you for reading.