nature's course taken
Haiku poem contest entry35 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Glorious picture to go with your poem.
Let me try:
A storm's on it's way
Darkness and destruction nears
No safety found here
Whaddah think? Karen :-)
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Glorious picture to go with your poem.
Let me try:
A storm's on it's way
Darkness and destruction nears
No safety found here
Whaddah think? Karen :-)
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I love it!
You're good at these. I love play on words as I'm sure you've noticed.
Thank you again, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your haiku about climate change, which is particularly pertinent to the 3,400-mile coast of California. I admired your embedding the poem into the parallel picture. Sighs but best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you for sharing your haiku about climate change, which is particularly pertinent to the 3,400-mile coast of California. I admired your embedding the poem into the parallel picture. Sighs but best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Joan, for this most excellent review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Marie Foster1
A very timely poem. I am in Florida and while we have been given a more favorable forecast for hurricane Dorian, it is still an ominous entity. Even though we have such great inventions and have such great knowledge we are still at the mercy of the elements. Maybe it is God's way of showing us who's boss :) Good job!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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A very timely poem. I am in Florida and while we have been given a more favorable forecast for hurricane Dorian, it is still an ominous entity. Even though we have such great inventions and have such great knowledge we are still at the mercy of the elements. Maybe it is God's way of showing us who's boss :) Good job!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Happy To hear you may be given mercy on this one. Harvey took a huge toll on us in Houston. Thank you for the awesome review.
God bless
Steve
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God truly was merciful. We did not even have a power outage. I live on the outskirts of Orlando.
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What a blessing!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets most of the required elements for haiku. The single biggest missing piece is the 'kigo' (seasonal reference) as there is none either implied or concrete. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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This meets most of the required elements for haiku. The single biggest missing piece is the 'kigo' (seasonal reference) as there is none either implied or concrete. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thank you Mystic for the awesome review. I agree, I should have added summer in there.
God bless
Steve
Comment from LisaMay
The sound of the rhythmic wind bellowing is indeed frightening - that is a great way to describe it.
We are often at the mercy of nature taking her course of action, living in fear of the hurricane bringing destruction, but then her course might mysteriously change. I hope the terrible storm threatening in the accompanying photo was moving out to sea rather than coming inland.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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The sound of the rhythmic wind bellowing is indeed frightening - that is a great way to describe it.
We are often at the mercy of nature taking her course of action, living in fear of the hurricane bringing destruction, but then her course might mysteriously change. I hope the terrible storm threatening in the accompanying photo was moving out to sea rather than coming inland.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Nature is certainly a beast at times. Thank you for the awesome review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Cheryl I
Wow, that is some graphic you have there. Scary looking (is that a hurricane?) I must say. I bet that wind bellowed! I would not want to be there. Nice job on the poem, as well.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Wow, that is some graphic you have there. Scary looking (is that a hurricane?) I must say. I bet that wind bellowed! I would not want to be there. Nice job on the poem, as well.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the awesome review Cheryl. Not sure if that is an actual hurricane. Just looked scary to me lol.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest entry and should od well in the voting booth. I live in Florida where everyone is thankful that the hurricane seems to be drifting away from the coast.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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This is an excellent contest entry and should od well in the voting booth. I live in Florida where everyone is thankful that the hurricane seems to be drifting away from the coast.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Yes, we are too here in Houston. Florida takes quite the beating most years. Thank you for the review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from JanPerry
The quote could be centred. I like your nature's course and explaining eloquently about rythmic winds which bellow. Great stuff. Looks like the town is in trouble if it moves over. I wonder where it is?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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The quote could be centred. I like your nature's course and explaining eloquently about rythmic winds which bellow. Great stuff. Looks like the town is in trouble if it moves over. I wonder where it is?
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Not sure where that is Jan. Thank you for the awesome review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. The photo you have included with your poem is strikingly fearsome. It is ominous looking. Your haiku entry clearly conforms to the rules of composition. Good luck in the contest. Robert
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Hello mystery writer. The photo you have included with your poem is strikingly fearsome. It is ominous looking. Your haiku entry clearly conforms to the rules of composition. Good luck in the contest. Robert
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thank you Robert.
God bless
Steve
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You're welcome.
Comment from Raul1
I like how you wrote this poem. Very good writing. The lines are perfect. Thanks for sharing! No grammatical errors. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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I like how you wrote this poem. Very good writing. The lines are perfect. Thanks for sharing! No grammatical errors. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thank you Raul.
God bless
Steve
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You're welcome.