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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "My Warrior Sleeps"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
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Comment from Sylvia Page
This is a beautiful tribute and a great dedication to a memory of love. I am glad you came back to write. Writing helps to get over your loss. At FS you meet a lot of great writers as you must already know. I too came back after some illness kept me away. Wish you the very best.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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This is a beautiful tribute and a great dedication to a memory of love. I am glad you came back to write. Writing helps to get over your loss. At FS you meet a lot of great writers as you must already know. I too came back after some illness kept me away. Wish you the very best.
Sylvia
Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Please accept my apologies for not responding in a mannerly fashion to your kind words and for taking the time to read my flash fiction. It's been far more difficult to cope with my loss than I could ever imagined and I haven't been able to move forward with my life very well. I do believe my faith will lead me through this, but it will take time. Thank you again Sylvia...Wishing you the best! Carol
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Sending you healing in mind and spirit in the Mighty Name of Jesus. I will pray for you. Have faith and trust in HIs love.
Blessings
Sylvia
Comment from Sally Law
This is so sweet and made me cry! I love my husband and he is still with me as my mighty warrior. A sweet dedication and fine offering. I will fan you now and look forward to reading more of your wonderful works.
Sending you my best today as always, with condolences in your great loss.
Sally xo
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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This is so sweet and made me cry! I love my husband and he is still with me as my mighty warrior. A sweet dedication and fine offering. I will fan you now and look forward to reading more of your wonderful works.
Sending you my best today as always, with condolences in your great loss.
Sally xo
Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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My sincere apologies for taking so long to respond to your kind review and wishes. I thought I could Begin Again but it appears it will take me longer to pull myself together. I have weathered many terrible storms in my lifetime but this one has really shaken my soul. I have faith that I will find the light at the end of the tunnel...just not as quickly as I thought. He was and will always be My Love...My Life. Thank you again for sharing with me. Carol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A tribute to your husband here who encouraged you to return to your writing and this post has been delivered with great warmth and tenderness and many will identify with this situation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
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A tribute to your husband here who encouraged you to return to your writing and this post has been delivered with great warmth and tenderness and many will identify with this situation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
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These few words express the ultimate turning point in our lives and the fact that our love will never change regardless that I now travel on alone. I know how much he loved me and wanted me to pursue my passions again and I truly will try to honor him. Thank you so much for commenting. I truly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is sad, so sad. The one that you've loved that seems like forever is slipping away and their is nothing that you can do about it. Life was never meant to be traveled alone and somehow, you must soldier on. Great feelings and emotions are infused into this well written work. May the Lord give you comfort and peace in your time of mourning. Thanks for sharing this very personal event with us. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
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This is sad, so sad. The one that you've loved that seems like forever is slipping away and their is nothing that you can do about it. Life was never meant to be traveled alone and somehow, you must soldier on. Great feelings and emotions are infused into this well written work. May the Lord give you comfort and peace in your time of mourning. Thanks for sharing this very personal event with us. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind and understanding words. My heart is shattered but something just made me want to honor his wishes and try to put our last moments on paper. I truly appreciate your kindness...Carol
Comment from Mary Wakeford
In 80 words you eloquently poured out the last moment of a loved one's last breath, so aptly titled the end of our story.
Your notes brought it all home on a personal level. I am sorry for your loss. Welcome back to writing. Your husband is helping to push your pen from another realm. Blessings.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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In 80 words you eloquently poured out the last moment of a loved one's last breath, so aptly titled the end of our story.
Your notes brought it all home on a personal level. I am sorry for your loss. Welcome back to writing. Your husband is helping to push your pen from another realm. Blessings.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind words and the review. My life has been so focused on my husband and now I must try to move forward with through my writing. Have a great day! - Carol
Comment from misscookie
I can relate to your word. When
god call my marine home I had mixed emotions we had twenty-two years together that and the love we shared no one can take away.
I. Proud your returning to your passion and mark you make he will be with you.
Cookie
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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I can relate to your word. When
god call my marine home I had mixed emotions we had twenty-two years together that and the love we shared no one can take away.
I. Proud your returning to your passion and mark you make he will be with you.
Cookie
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Hi Cookie...Mike and I were together as friends and then a couple for 40 years. He was my life and it will be difficult to move forward but I will because it is what he would want. I truly appreciate your kind words and the review. Thank you! - Carol
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Your very welcome, stay strong and on praying ground.
Cookie
Comment from LisaMay
This recounts the ultimate sad event when a partner dies... it was your last story, but now you have new beginnings again following the path he would be pleased to see you take: your brave new world as a writer again. You have written this well - I hope to see more from your hand.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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This recounts the ultimate sad event when a partner dies... it was your last story, but now you have new beginnings again following the path he would be pleased to see you take: your brave new world as a writer again. You have written this well - I hope to see more from your hand.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind words. I never thought it would be such a struggle to put words down on paper again but I know it is what he would want and so I will give it my best effort. Slowly at first but definitely forward. Thank you again. I appreciate your thoughts. - Carol
Comment from Cheryl I
This is a very romantic and sad story, but quite well written. I found it easy to read, and easy to imagine being there. You did a very nice job. Cheryl
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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This is a very romantic and sad story, but quite well written. I found it easy to read, and easy to imagine being there. You did a very nice job. Cheryl
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2019
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My emotions were raw when I wrote this but I knew he wanted me to write again. Thank you for appreciating the moment and for your kind words. - Carol
Comment from Sallyo
Lovely tribute and a brave posting in the circumstances.
I realise the suggestions for editing I make would change the word count of the story... so in fairness I'll also suggest three cuts (below) to conserve the integrity of the count.
. His skin feverish.
. His skin was feverish.
alright
all right (twice)
his frail arms were covered with dark purple bruises.
his frail arms bore dark purple bruises. (saves 2)
It's going to be all right."
It'll be all right."
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Lovely tribute and a brave posting in the circumstances.
I realise the suggestions for editing I make would change the word count of the story... so in fairness I'll also suggest three cuts (below) to conserve the integrity of the count.
. His skin feverish.
. His skin was feverish.
alright
all right (twice)
his frail arms were covered with dark purple bruises.
his frail arms bore dark purple bruises. (saves 2)
It's going to be all right."
It'll be all right."
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind reply. The "It's going to be alright" came from a Kenny Chesney song and a wall plaque i have, but I understand the correct spelling and have made the changes. I appreciate you taking the time to make helpful suggestions...often my head is still water-logged. Thanks again!
Comment from DonandVicki
This eighty word story carries a volume of images and words with it. Any reader can imagine a plot like this the succinct way that you wrote this piece. Well done.
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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This eighty word story carries a volume of images and words with it. Any reader can imagine a plot like this the succinct way that you wrote this piece. Well done.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind response. I appreciate that you took the time to read and respond.
