Seasons
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very good and beautiful haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and very lovely and amazing imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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This is a very good and beautiful haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and very lovely and amazing imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now isn't that just a deep contemplation for such a short offering, Trisha! ;) Yes! Nature does have her reasons... and she is also a whole heckuvalot stronger than we give her credit for! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Wow -- now isn't that just a deep contemplation for such a short offering, Trisha! ;) Yes! Nature does have her reasons... and she is also a whole heckuvalot stronger than we give her credit for! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Rikki66
Good luck in the contest.****************************************************************************LXVI******************************************************************************************
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Good luck in the contest.****************************************************************************LXVI******************************************************************************************
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much
Hugs, Trisha
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Welcome,XOXO
LXVI
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Thanks, Rikki, you?re very kind.
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:)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a well constructed 5-7-5, but it is not haiku. Rules of haiku:
Naming convention: haiku (nature has reasons).
No caps or personification is allowed and you use both as 'reasoning' is a human quality.
Line 1 and 2 should be interconnected and provide a concrete image of a single moment in time and yours is two separate statements sans imagery.
A 'kigo' (seasonal reference) is required either concrete or implied and you don't have one. Artwork does not count to supply a seasonal reference as most haiku lacks artwork since the words alone should paint the picture in the reader's mind.
Line 3 should provide a 'satori' or AHA Moment and this is merely a statement.
Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
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This is a well constructed 5-7-5, but it is not haiku. Rules of haiku:
Naming convention: haiku (nature has reasons).
No caps or personification is allowed and you use both as 'reasoning' is a human quality.
Line 1 and 2 should be interconnected and provide a concrete image of a single moment in time and yours is two separate statements sans imagery.
A 'kigo' (seasonal reference) is required either concrete or implied and you don't have one. Artwork does not count to supply a seasonal reference as most haiku lacks artwork since the words alone should paint the picture in the reader's mind.
Line 3 should provide a 'satori' or AHA Moment and this is merely a statement.
Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2019
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Maybe I should just withdraw it from competition. Thank you!
Comment from Cheryl I
I really like the gif you chose for this one. I have to learn how to do that. I enjoyed your poem. The rain can be beautiful, even when we don't think we need it. The trees need moisture for over the winter. Very nice job! Cheryl
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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I really like the gif you chose for this one. I have to learn how to do that. I enjoyed your poem. The rain can be beautiful, even when we don't think we need it. The trees need moisture for over the winter. Very nice job! Cheryl
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Mark D. R.
No one is raining on your poetry parade today! Fantastic moving image reinforces your contest entry. I have no complaints about Nature's weather (-:
Do like your choice of coloring and the centering of text lines.
Capitalization or the lack of punctuation is in your poetic hand. IMHO caps are not needed for your beautiful verse. If you insist, then consider punctuation to end each line.
Best wishes in the contest voting.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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No one is raining on your poetry parade today! Fantastic moving image reinforces your contest entry. I have no complaints about Nature's weather (-:
Do like your choice of coloring and the centering of text lines.
Capitalization or the lack of punctuation is in your poetic hand. IMHO caps are not needed for your beautiful verse. If you insist, then consider punctuation to end each line.
Best wishes in the contest voting.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2019
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Thanks, it?s an ingrained habit to capitalize. I now am stuck between CAPS or No caps. LOL, your point is well taken. Thanks for the second reminder!
Hugs, Trisha
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Trisha,
It is a dilemma. For me since I am surely not a poetry formalist (nor am I a poetry expert!), so I prefer the informality of no caps (-:
Mark
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a short reminder that things happen in nature that we cannot always explain or want to clean up after, but sometimes or even often you get that 'bonus' of a beautiful moment. I hear some long "e" assonance in "reasons," "see," and "need." Nice post.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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This is a short reminder that things happen in nature that we cannot always explain or want to clean up after, but sometimes or even often you get that 'bonus' of a beautiful moment. I hear some long "e" assonance in "reasons," "see," and "need." Nice post.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much
Hugs, Trisha
