Chip's Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Don't Need Love."FanStory Collection
28 total reviews
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A well written Cinquain contest entry with 2-4-6-8-2 syllable counts. A complimentary photo artwork. I like the emotions regarding "raw and real." Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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A well written Cinquain contest entry with 2-4-6-8-2 syllable counts. A complimentary photo artwork. I like the emotions regarding "raw and real." Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Lance.
Comment from LisaMay
There are certainly times when passion overrules propriety, and we think love is an unnecessary complexity. We can ignore the regret of our shameful actions, but it is actually possible to have love that is also raw and real.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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There are certainly times when passion overrules propriety, and we think love is an unnecessary complexity. We can ignore the regret of our shameful actions, but it is actually possible to have love that is also raw and real.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2019
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Thank you, LisaMay.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
For the different stages of our lives, there is always human need laced in there. And, yes, there are times where we find ourselves at a place physical needs are all there are or all there are room/time for... :) A great offering for the contest, sir -- true life just IS! ;) :) Good luck and thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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For the different stages of our lives, there is always human need laced in there. And, yes, there are times where we find ourselves at a place physical needs are all there are or all there are room/time for... :) A great offering for the contest, sir -- true life just IS! ;) :) Good luck and thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 23-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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I agree, Yvette...as always, thanks for the read/review!
Comment from closetpoetjester
Holy moly, wow! There was a bit of steam coming off this one, yes sirree
After I wiped my moistened
lenses and took off my
glasses I found I definitely wanted to give you
six
Wonderfully done, just enough poetic titillation to stir the senses, pique interest and get the imagination flowing.
Verry well done, er...what was your name again? LOL
P
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Holy moly, wow! There was a bit of steam coming off this one, yes sirree
After I wiped my moistened
lenses and took off my
glasses I found I definitely wanted to give you
six
Wonderfully done, just enough poetic titillation to stir the senses, pique interest and get the imagination flowing.
Verry well done, er...what was your name again? LOL
P
Comment Written 23-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Ah, Phillippa, thank you for the thoughtful, poetic review and the generous rating...glad it stirred something, what's the point otherwise? The last line was well played- a review worthy of a review!
Comment from Tiffanny Brooks
This is a cool play on Cinquain poetry, and a more sophisticated and elegant view of the one-night stand. :)
I wish you well in the contest!
Tiffanny
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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This is a cool play on Cinquain poetry, and a more sophisticated and elegant view of the one-night stand. :)
I wish you well in the contest!
Tiffanny
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Tiffanny!
Comment from misscookie
Not only the photo capture my attention your words have my mind and emotions spinning in full speed.
i feel for anyone who says they don't need love.
what they are saying to me is they are yearning for it.
they are wearing a mask to hide their pain,
PAIN
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
COOKIE
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Not only the photo capture my attention your words have my mind and emotions spinning in full speed.
i feel for anyone who says they don't need love.
what they are saying to me is they are yearning for it.
they are wearing a mask to hide their pain,
PAIN
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
COOKIE
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Many thanks, Cookie!
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your very welcome.
take care
cookie
Comment from Heather Knight
Lovely poem. I particularly like the third line where you speak of somewhere raw and real.
Your choice of artwork is also perfect.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Lovely poem. I particularly like the third line where you speak of somewhere raw and real.
Your choice of artwork is also perfect.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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And than you for reading/reviewing, Maria!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Chip. And your author's notes you mentioned the picture and I would say that you were verse is well-suited to that picture and vice versa. That might be a week review they do go so well together. Robert
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Hello Chip. And your author's notes you mentioned the picture and I would say that you were verse is well-suited to that picture and vice versa. That might be a week review they do go so well together. Robert
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Robert.
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You're welcome!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Chip, I enjoyed this poem. As a hopeless romantic myself I think there is nothing better than love. With that being said, sometimes you just want unbridled, raw passion, rip my clothes off and ..........
Good job my friend! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Hello Chip, I enjoyed this poem. As a hopeless romantic myself I think there is nothing better than love. With that being said, sometimes you just want unbridled, raw passion, rip my clothes off and ..........
Good job my friend! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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I agree, Poet..thanks!
Comment from nomi338
Hm... sounds like someone is ready to let their hair down and do the wild thing without regret or restraint. I have been there, felt that and reveled in the wild freedom of the moment, but all to soon sanity returns and you have to go home, get some sleep, and get ready for school or work.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Hm... sounds like someone is ready to let their hair down and do the wild thing without regret or restraint. I have been there, felt that and reveled in the wild freedom of the moment, but all to soon sanity returns and you have to go home, get some sleep, and get ready for school or work.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Ha, I'm with you on that, Nomi. Thanks for weighing in!
