Polished boots
War ( Love Letter)7 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I like this. It sounds like it is written in an authentic voice. I like the details spent on what the father's heritage was like as well with the boots kept polished in spite of having only one leg. I might capitalize "sergeant's" in the fifth to last line. I liked the zoomorphism with the enemy compared to cats snarling and hissing. Very strong entry.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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I like this. It sounds like it is written in an authentic voice. I like the details spent on what the father's heritage was like as well with the boots kept polished in spite of having only one leg. I might capitalize "sergeant's" in the fifth to last line. I liked the zoomorphism with the enemy compared to cats snarling and hissing. Very strong entry.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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I like the description in your critique 'authentic voice'- thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sad letter written here with some home truths that would be unlikely to be included to a loved one, but you touched my heart with these words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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A sad letter written here with some home truths that would be unlikely to be included to a loved one, but you touched my heart with these words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thanks for reviewing and comments zanya
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful and moving story. You choose a subtile way to represent your worries before the battle - a love, goodbye letter. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Beautiful and moving story. You choose a subtile way to represent your worries before the battle - a love, goodbye letter. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Superb review zanya
Comment from rockmann
That was very powerful. There were a few grammatical mistakes, and that was the only thing keeping me from giving you six stars. But the depth of your writing made me forget about them. I have to wonder if there is a kernel of truth in your story, or is it all fiction. I am betting this is a true story. Great work and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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That was very powerful. There were a few grammatical mistakes, and that was the only thing keeping me from giving you six stars. But the depth of your writing made me forget about them. I have to wonder if there is a kernel of truth in your story, or is it all fiction. I am betting this is a true story. Great work and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Superb review and yes it is all fiction but it's encouraging that you thought it might have a grain of fact in it ! zanya
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's so sad. I wonder if Edward makes it home to Isobel. The polished boots and perfectly made beds never made any sense to me either. How is that going to help win the war? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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That's so sad. I wonder if Edward makes it home to Isobel. The polished boots and perfectly made beds never made any sense to me either. How is that going to help win the war? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Wanda Faith Sewell
War is always tough for everyone. That's what it takes sometimes for freedom to prevail. I like how this soldier takes the time to write his wife in the midst of a very hard time.
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War is always tough for everyone. That's what it takes sometimes for freedom to prevail. I like how this soldier takes the time to write his wife in the midst of a very hard time.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Yes indeed - thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from Sallyo
Touching, and well constructed with the focus on the boots. I'm not sure where it's set as there are cats about... could be France? Well done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Touching, and well constructed with the focus on the boots. I'm not sure where it's set as there are cats about... could be France? Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Great review zanya
