we truly ride upon the Meaning
how often our good meanings are not so clearly delivered!21 total reviews
Comment from Susan X Smith
Your message is admirable. However, I think if you used more spacing it would be easier to read. Still, I enjoyed your poem. Wishing you continued good fortune.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Your message is admirable. However, I think if you used more spacing it would be easier to read. Still, I enjoyed your poem. Wishing you continued good fortune.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Thank you Susan for your lovely review and generous stars, so very much appreciated! Sure hope you will stay tuned always! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from poetwatch
What I gather from your poetic speech is that many times we wish to convey a message and it is interpret completely different of what we wrote. That is a poet's nightmare, but it is also a way to understand that not all people are on the same wavelength. As a poet we wish for those that read us see what we want them to see, yet, what they see is what they want to see. :) You see? As a writer it has to be more clear.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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What I gather from your poetic speech is that many times we wish to convey a message and it is interpret completely different of what we wrote. That is a poet's nightmare, but it is also a way to understand that not all people are on the same wavelength. As a poet we wish for those that read us see what we want them to see, yet, what they see is what they want to see. :) You see? As a writer it has to be more clear.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Thanks so much poetwatch, for your great review and stars, so very much appreciated! Hoping to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
Comment from Iza Deleanu
So rightš???and when you try to want to clarify becomes worse, so why to bother? Potatoes and tomatoes they are vegetables after all:) thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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So rightš???and when you try to want to clarify becomes worse, so why to bother? Potatoes and tomatoes they are vegetables after all:) thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Thanks Iza, for your lovely review and generous stars, so very much appreciated! Glad to meet you and hope to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Sylvia Page
How often can words be misconstrued, when someone wants something said in a different context? It is always good to follow simple rules. Your prose /poem says it all.
Best
Sylvia
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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How often can words be misconstrued, when someone wants something said in a different context? It is always good to follow simple rules. Your prose /poem says it all.
Best
Sylvia
Comment Written 24-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2019
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Wow! Sylvia, thanks so much for your great review and wonderful stars, so very sincerely appreciated, and hope to see you often in the future! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from BeasPeas
I do think this is especially true when we e-mail someone, Vance. It's always a good idea to re-read what we've written to see if it makes sense the way we intended it to be. Many words can be misconstrued. Not so much, I think, when speaking in person or on the phone because the other person can ask if such-and-such is what we meant, but in writing it's easier to be misunderstood. Marilyn
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I do think this is especially true when we e-mail someone, Vance. It's always a good idea to re-read what we've written to see if it makes sense the way we intended it to be. Many words can be misconstrued. Not so much, I think, when speaking in person or on the phone because the other person can ask if such-and-such is what we meant, but in writing it's easier to be misunderstood. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I just experienced that disconnect in an interchange with a poet here, how much sadder when it crops up between two people are close, as in romance. Well done.
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I just experienced that disconnect in an interchange with a poet here, how much sadder when it crops up between two people are close, as in romance. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This sounds like it would go well with reading out loud. It is clean enough for any audience of any age. I get the impression that the person whose voice is in the poem is past the halfway mark of his life, since "dreams of better moments days and years" falls right in the middle of the prose poem. I thought the poem attained a certain lyrical quality in spite of the prose format, so I checked to see your profile definitely includes history with writing songs. I think there was an extra pronoun "I" inserted here: for lack of strength l to rule
but hopefully that is an easy fix.
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This sounds like it would go well with reading out loud. It is clean enough for any audience of any age. I get the impression that the person whose voice is in the poem is past the halfway mark of his life, since "dreams of better moments days and years" falls right in the middle of the prose poem. I thought the poem attained a certain lyrical quality in spite of the prose format, so I checked to see your profile definitely includes history with writing songs. I think there was an extra pronoun "I" inserted here: for lack of strength l to rule
but hopefully that is an easy fix.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
Comment from Janetsue
This creative posting contains a lot of strong internal rhyme while mentioning important topics--such as good will and romance. I like your phrasing of the 'winds of fate that call the scores...' I hope your own garden is blossoming right now with a profusion of cheerfulness and beauty!
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This creative posting contains a lot of strong internal rhyme while mentioning important topics--such as good will and romance. I like your phrasing of the 'winds of fate that call the scores...' I hope your own garden is blossoming right now with a profusion of cheerfulness and beauty!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
Comment from judiverse
Excellent point--so often our true meaning and intentions are sometimes not perfectly clear. Do we follow our commitment or leave everything to chance? Your mention of roll of the dice of life is excellent. Is that what determines whether we win or lose? This is beautifully worded. If it's a poem, make it look like a poem. You have great rhyme, and if you organized this into lines, it would show the rhyme off. judi
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Excellent point--so often our true meaning and intentions are sometimes not perfectly clear. Do we follow our commitment or leave everything to chance? Your mention of roll of the dice of life is excellent. Is that what determines whether we win or lose? This is beautifully worded. If it's a poem, make it look like a poem. You have great rhyme, and if you organized this into lines, it would show the rhyme off. judi
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This says in most of the cases, in our different courses of living, we are so gullible, we make mistakes, without proper expression of our words and intentions and invite our own causes of sorrows and sufferings; we do not know how to make effective communications and we are mostly inexpressive; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
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This says in most of the cases, in our different courses of living, we are so gullible, we make mistakes, without proper expression of our words and intentions and invite our own causes of sorrows and sufferings; we do not know how to make effective communications and we are mostly inexpressive; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019