Lady
She came for a reason.33 total reviews
Comment from Rikki66
Good luck in the contest. A supernatural intervention, a mothers visitation. Natural phenomena of light and memories questions to in-depth to be answered here.
Rikki LXVI
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Good luck in the contest. A supernatural intervention, a mothers visitation. Natural phenomena of light and memories questions to in-depth to be answered here.
Rikki LXVI
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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enjoyed your review.
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Welcome;
Rikki LXVI
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the surprise ending in your flash fiction. I believe in spirits that come out to assist us when we need help. I believe that God can do anything. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I like the surprise ending in your flash fiction. I believe in spirits that come out to assist us when we need help. I believe that God can do anything. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you and I believe you're right.
Comment from Susan Larson
I don't know if this is fact, fiction or fiction based on fact, but such things do happen, possibly as a result of "angels" from a higher dimension entering ours. I think it would have more impact if you put "lady" on a separate line.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I don't know if this is fact, fiction or fiction based on fact, but such things do happen, possibly as a result of "angels" from a higher dimension entering ours. I think it would have more impact if you put "lady" on a separate line.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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thank you.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
This makes me recall so many instances after my father died when I just lost concentration and focus. Your build and tension is just wonderful. You tell a complete tale in less than 200 words.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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This makes me recall so many instances after my father died when I just lost concentration and focus. Your build and tension is just wonderful. You tell a complete tale in less than 200 words.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you
Comment from kiwigirl2821
The idea of this story is very good indeed. The ending a surprise. What I didn't particularly enjoy was the choppy way the sentences flowed into one another. It was like reading a list of facts as opposed to a coherent easy flowing story. Good luck. I hope that helps a little. Take care.
xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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The idea of this story is very good indeed. The ending a surprise. What I didn't particularly enjoy was the choppy way the sentences flowed into one another. It was like reading a list of facts as opposed to a coherent easy flowing story. Good luck. I hope that helps a little. Take care.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Enjoyed review flash fiction limited my words
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You found your cottage saved, the lady came for a purpose, luckily you stopped for her, your mother, your angel died a few days ago; you thought your mother in her; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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You found your cottage saved, the lady came for a purpose, luckily you stopped for her, your mother, your angel died a few days ago; you thought your mother in her; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Mastery
Good job on this flash fiction, Tom. Fate is certainly a strange thing, isn't it?
I suggest one thing though. In this line:
"I step from the car. "Lady!" She's gone!
Put the words "Lady" and "Gone" on a seperate lines for more emphasis.
Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Good job on this flash fiction, Tom. Fate is certainly a strange thing, isn't it?
I suggest one thing though. In this line:
"I step from the car. "Lady!" She's gone!
Put the words "Lady" and "Gone" on a seperate lines for more emphasis.
Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Good advice thank you.
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: ) Bob
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Wow, that's quite a tale you've shared here. Your mother who was your angel died. You needed to get away and head to the summer cottage. An apparition appears in the road before you reach the cottage that looks like your mother. You get out to see who or what it was. Before you get to the cottage, a tree smashes it. I had to retype what you said to process what a miracle that was. She definately would have been killed. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Wow, that's quite a tale you've shared here. Your mother who was your angel died. You needed to get away and head to the summer cottage. An apparition appears in the road before you reach the cottage that looks like your mother. You get out to see who or what it was. Before you get to the cottage, a tree smashes it. I had to retype what you said to process what a miracle that was. She definately would have been killed. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Sallyo
Great little supernatural flash! You packed a lot of information, background and personality into just a few words. The one word... LADY... spoken to the possibly unreal ghost/spirit/angel works a treat.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Great little supernatural flash! You packed a lot of information, background and personality into just a few words. The one word... LADY... spoken to the possibly unreal ghost/spirit/angel works a treat.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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thank you.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Flash Fiction 150 word story you have penned for the contest. You used excellent words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. It all went together so well. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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This is a very well written Flash Fiction 150 word story you have penned for the contest. You used excellent words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. It all went together so well. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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thank you for your kind words
