tanka prose (roots)
a memory43 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very nicely composed post of tanka prose, Janet. Super first line to open your piece. I can identify with the lovely lily-of-the-valley and the sweet fragrance from those tiny bells. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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This is very nicely composed post of tanka prose, Janet. Super first line to open your piece. I can identify with the lovely lily-of-the-valley and the sweet fragrance from those tiny bells. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Thank you Marilyn. I appreciate your kind comments. Lily-of-the-valley is a real favorite.
Janet
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your reminiscences. I enjoyed your vivid descriptions and your use of alliteration in the 4-6-3-4-6 tanka. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you for sharing your reminiscences. I enjoyed your vivid descriptions and your use of alliteration in the 4-6-3-4-6 tanka. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you Joan. I enjoyed the reminiscences while writing this. So pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings and Happy New Year
Janet
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is an excellent
tanka prose poem.
-The prose section is
beautifully written with
your memories of
your mother's house
and all of the nature
surrounding you.
-I like how you "smile"
and comment on the robin
not "prepared for a cold shower."
-The last paragraph is very good, too,
along with a very well written tanka
that reinforces the pleasant scene
you have described.
-A very good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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-This is an excellent
tanka prose poem.
-The prose section is
beautifully written with
your memories of
your mother's house
and all of the nature
surrounding you.
-I like how you "smile"
and comment on the robin
not "prepared for a cold shower."
-The last paragraph is very good, too,
along with a very well written tanka
that reinforces the pleasant scene
you have described.
-A very good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2019
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Thank you Pam for your exceptional review, stars and good wishes. I appreciate hearing from you.
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You are very welcome, and thank you!
Comment from Neonewman
This is a beautifully crafted piece you have entered for this particular Contemporary Tanka Prose. I enjoyed the narrative piece before as it set the tone for your muse.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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This is a beautifully crafted piece you have entered for this particular Contemporary Tanka Prose. I enjoyed the narrative piece before as it set the tone for your muse.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
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my pleasure.
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your lovely descriptive prose - I felt I was there in the garden. I loved watching the robin in the bird bath.
Also liked the memory of picking the flowers for your mother.
The Tanka is a lovely condensed version of the prose.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I enjoyed reading your lovely descriptive prose - I felt I was there in the garden. I loved watching the robin in the bird bath.
Also liked the memory of picking the flowers for your mother.
The Tanka is a lovely condensed version of the prose.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you Nancy for your kind and encouraging review and good luck wishes.
Comment from Raul1
This poem is very good for the poem contest. I like it because it's easy to read and understand. No grammatical errors. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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This poem is very good for the poem contest. I like it because it's easy to read and understand. No grammatical errors. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review and good luck wishes.
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You're welcome
Comment from Sugarray77
I really like this and enjoyed reading the beautiful description of early dawn and the dew moistened morning bouquet. Well done on the crafting of this lovely verse.
Melissa
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I really like this and enjoyed reading the beautiful description of early dawn and the dew moistened morning bouquet. Well done on the crafting of this lovely verse.
Melissa
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you Melissa for your kind and encouraging review and the generous rating.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I really have to try this form sometime! Very upbeat style here with the flowers, young robin disgusted slightly by his first cold bath, and the dawn. And then there are poetic devices right in the tanka, too. I see alliteration in "dainty" and "dangle" and "time" and "treasured." Very nice. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I really have to try this form sometime! Very upbeat style here with the flowers, young robin disgusted slightly by his first cold bath, and the dawn. And then there are poetic devices right in the tanka, too. I see alliteration in "dainty" and "dangle" and "time" and "treasured." Very nice. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. You should write a tanka or tanka prose. They are challenging but fun.
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Yes, I should. Maybe on the next post, since I've done a couple of humorous ones lately.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
And you have captured that moment, those memories, in this treasure f a poem. Perhaps I should press some rose petals for myself (would it be the same to buy potpourri?)
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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And you have captured that moment, those memories, in this treasure f a poem. Perhaps I should press some rose petals for myself (would it be the same to buy potpourri?)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you Darlene for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from judester
This is a wonderful glimpse into your morning. I love lily of the valley and yes, my own memories when I smell the
sweet flowers. Bravo, judester
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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This is a wonderful glimpse into your morning. I love lily of the valley and yes, my own memories when I smell the
sweet flowers. Bravo, judester
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you judester for your kind and encouraging review and for your generous rating.