The Buried Coffee Can
Hiding his money.43 total reviews
Comment from E. Denison
Wonderful work here, Willie. I really like not only the narrative you told, but the way you told it. It has the feeling of a Gordon Lightfoot ballad. Really well done. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Wonderful work here, Willie. I really like not only the narrative you told, but the way you told it. It has the feeling of a Gordon Lightfoot ballad. Really well done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I really appreciate your review and kind words + the stars. Thank you.
Comment from June Sargent
This is quite a story of - not revenge, as that was not who he was - justice. You reap what you sow - and his family did not plant any seeds of love or affection, So, the soil was appropriately where he hid his money - with no happy returns. I thoroughly enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme. Most of all - the story of an old cowboy.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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This is quite a story of - not revenge, as that was not who he was - justice. You reap what you sow - and his family did not plant any seeds of love or affection, So, the soil was appropriately where he hid his money - with no happy returns. I thoroughly enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme. Most of all - the story of an old cowboy.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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June, I really appreciate your review, stars and very kind words.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Willie P. Smith,
Nice piece of Western Poetry meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hello Willie P. Smith,
Nice piece of Western Poetry meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thanks RP, for those very nice 6 stars and kind review. They are very
much appreciated.
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Willie P. Smith, Most Welcome! It's my pleasure!!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Wendy G
Such a sad poem but also very thought provoking about fallibly relationships, growing old, priorities, and loneliness. Thoughtfully written and crafted with skill. Best wishes for this contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Such a sad poem but also very thought provoking about fallibly relationships, growing old, priorities, and loneliness. Thoughtfully written and crafted with skill. Best wishes for this contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thanks Sally, I appreciate your review, kind words and stars.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I loved this story and going to save this for my grandkids. The pace is easy, words flow smoothly as the story proceeds to its karmic end. Yes. Unexpected things happen in old age. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I loved this story and going to save this for my grandkids. The pace is easy, words flow smoothly as the story proceeds to its karmic end. Yes. Unexpected things happen in old age. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you friend, for your very kind words, stars and review.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
How cute Willie.
You tell a great story in a poem!
The story is paced well and the rhymes are strong. The rhythm is off just a tad but this isn't a sonnet and no one is counting syllables
Just let me know where he lived and I'll go there and make myself a cup of coffee! Lol
Enjoyable read
Katiemae
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How cute Willie.
You tell a great story in a poem!
The story is paced well and the rhymes are strong. The rhythm is off just a tad but this isn't a sonnet and no one is counting syllables
Just let me know where he lived and I'll go there and make myself a cup of coffee! Lol
Enjoyable read
Katiemae
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
Comment from Senyai
Hi Willie,
Ahh, this is pleasant karma, lol. Someone that's supposed to find that buried coffee can will someday.
I enjoyed your well crafted poem about an old cowboy who lived and died his way.
All the best in the writing prompt!
Senyai
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Hi Willie,
Ahh, this is pleasant karma, lol. Someone that's supposed to find that buried coffee can will someday.
I enjoyed your well crafted poem about an old cowboy who lived and died his way.
All the best in the writing prompt!
Senyai
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A good story of this old cowboy and his hidden coffee tin. If they didn't care for him in life well too bad for them. Well told story for the prompt, cheers
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A good story of this old cowboy and his hidden coffee tin. If they didn't care for him in life well too bad for them. Well told story for the prompt, cheers
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
Comment from royowen
You've got to go with the dad, the kids adored money far more than their dear old dad, but you've got to applaud the fact they never discovered the coffee pot. Beautifully written Willie, great expertise in your long poem, well done Willie, blessings Roy
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You've got to go with the dad, the kids adored money far more than their dear old dad, but you've got to applaud the fact they never discovered the coffee pot. Beautifully written Willie, great expertise in your long poem, well done Willie, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
Comment from MissMerri
A wonderful and well-told story. I was glad the selfish children didn't find his hidden money. I hope, though, you will some day write a sequel telling us who did find the hidden coffee can and what they were able to accomplish because of it. Nicely told tale and great entry for this contest.
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A wonderful and well-told story. I was glad the selfish children didn't find his hidden money. I hope, though, you will some day write a sequel telling us who did find the hidden coffee can and what they were able to accomplish because of it. Nicely told tale and great entry for this contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
