The Buried Coffee Can
Hiding his money.43 total reviews
Comment from amahra
Wow, you told a wonderful story; I couldn't wait to get to the next line to find out just how much was in that can. Oh well, I guess I'll just have to settle for the old man having the last laugh. But I'm willing to bet a jug of fine Corn that Jake knows where it is. "Don't get rid of that horse." LOL
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Wow, you told a wonderful story; I couldn't wait to get to the next line to find out just how much was in that can. Oh well, I guess I'll just have to settle for the old man having the last laugh. But I'm willing to bet a jug of fine Corn that Jake knows where it is. "Don't get rid of that horse." LOL
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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I am honored with your six stars, they are very much appreciated.
Comment from MAMONIA
Wow! This is super great. What a fantastic story in rhyme.
I enjoyed every line. And the best was the moral of the
story at the end.
That was a believable way to treat his children upon his
death.
Sorry to say, but there is so much truth in this tale.
Loved every line.
Best of luck,
Marie
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Wow! This is super great. What a fantastic story in rhyme.
I enjoyed every line. And the best was the moral of the
story at the end.
That was a believable way to treat his children upon his
death.
Sorry to say, but there is so much truth in this tale.
Loved every line.
Best of luck,
Marie
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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You honor me with the six stars. Your review and kind words are very
much appreciated.
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You are most deserving.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your narrartive poem is well-written, moving, and thoroughly enjoyable.
I actually knew a man who hid money around his place in jars. I especially like the story's end--glad they never found the money!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Your narrartive poem is well-written, moving, and thoroughly enjoyable.
I actually knew a man who hid money around his place in jars. I especially like the story's end--glad they never found the money!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Janice, thank you very much for the stars, review and nice words.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Great poem! This is just the sort of thing i could imagine a man doing as he grew older and more suspicious. the step after would be to forget where he had hidden it. But is that important? i have decided i don't want to grow old.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Great poem! This is just the sort of thing i could imagine a man doing as he grew older and more suspicious. the step after would be to forget where he had hidden it. But is that important? i have decided i don't want to grow old.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Katherine, thank you very much for your review and stars. They are much appreciated.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poem. Simple language to fit the main character. Rhyme scheme is consistent. Stays well on subject and moves through a story line well. I have no suggestions.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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An interesting poem. Simple language to fit the main character. Rhyme scheme is consistent. Stays well on subject and moves through a story line well. I have no suggestions.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Thank you, for your nice review and stars. They are very much appreciated.
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You are welcome
Comment from Boogienights
This is a great story and I love the ending. It was told in rhyme and I love that as well, it's my favorite form of poetry. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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This is a great story and I love the ending. It was told in rhyme and I love that as well, it's my favorite form of poetry. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Thank you, for the nice review and stars.
Comment from dragonpoet
Willie,
This shows how separate families can be. These children didn't deserve to find that money. Maybe he died smiling because he threw the money in the river before he died.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Willie,
This shows how separate families can be. These children didn't deserve to find that money. Maybe he died smiling because he threw the money in the river before he died.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Thank you, for the review and stars. They are both very much appreciated.
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You're welcome on both accounts.
Joan
Comment from T B Botts
Willie, you did a fine job telling a story in this poem. Cowboys have long enjoyed a special place in this country, their independence and toughness are admired. Too bad the kids didn't share those feelings. I loved the artwork. I wish I could decipher the name of the coffee. I like old things. Well done. Have a great day.
Tom
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Willie, you did a fine job telling a story in this poem. Cowboys have long enjoyed a special place in this country, their independence and toughness are admired. Too bad the kids didn't share those feelings. I loved the artwork. I wish I could decipher the name of the coffee. I like old things. Well done. Have a great day.
Tom
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Thank you, for the review and stars. They are very much appreciated.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a sterling write in its smooth narration and rhyming rhythm - the presentation was striking in its entirety, and I thoroughly enjoyed my read, especially the conclusion. His children got their just desserts, and fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest with this one...
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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In my opinion, a sterling write in its smooth narration and rhyming rhythm - the presentation was striking in its entirety, and I thoroughly enjoyed my read, especially the conclusion. His children got their just desserts, and fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest with this one...
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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Thank you, for your review an stars. Both are very much appreciated.
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You are very welcome indeed, Willie, my pleasure for such an absorbing read...,Eve
Comment from jenintorre
What a great story in a poem. I really enjoyed reading it and think it should do very well in the competition. I love the artwork. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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What a great story in a poem. I really enjoyed reading it and think it should do very well in the competition. I love the artwork. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2021
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You honor me with he six stars, they are very much appreciated.
