Beneath the Surface (a metaphor)
Trimeric contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is the most metaphorically composed poem may be it is telling something about state of feeling of a dead body when it lies under the grave; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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This is the most metaphorically composed poem may be it is telling something about state of feeling of a dead body when it lies under the grave; well said, well done.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Dr. Al. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from LyndaS
What a soothing write this is, poet. Your meter is hypnotic and your phrasing flows like honey. I like the idea of drifting beneath the chaos of life to find the calming solace of your inner self. This is a beautiful piece that has met the contest rules spot on. You should be proud of this excellent entry. Well done. Lynda
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What a soothing write this is, poet. Your meter is hypnotic and your phrasing flows like honey. I like the idea of drifting beneath the chaos of life to find the calming solace of your inner self. This is a beautiful piece that has met the contest rules spot on. You should be proud of this excellent entry. Well done. Lynda
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the great review and the giant sixer, Lynda. I'm glad you caught on to what I was actually saying with this piece. Looks like a couple people didn't quite get its true meaning. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a great night.
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Beautiful piece. Really exceptional.
Comment from humpwhistle
And a tragic metaphor it is.
Appreciate the subtle clues you leave behind.
It's all beneath the surface, drifting. Holding in--as breath.
I'm not a 'form' guy. I read and perceive. But I know you have conformed to a rigid template.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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And a tragic metaphor it is.
Appreciate the subtle clues you leave behind.
It's all beneath the surface, drifting. Holding in--as breath.
I'm not a 'form' guy. I read and perceive. But I know you have conformed to a rigid template.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review, Lee. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from moongirlwriter
OMGsh. . .I absolutely love this Trimeric Treat. . . and YOUR poem. It is so beautifully written. The artwork you've found and selected works perfectly as well. The very best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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OMGsh. . .I absolutely love this Trimeric Treat. . . and YOUR poem. It is so beautifully written. The artwork you've found and selected works perfectly as well. The very best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and the huge sixer, MGW. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a wonderful night.
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