Protesters at Jakes Pub
Protesters rebuked at the pub.6 total reviews
Comment from Nike23
This is very witty story. You set up the story for the joke. I like the build up. I like how you added Jack's perspective of the issue. Was his question intentional? I'd like to think that it wasn't.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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This is very witty story. You set up the story for the joke. I like the build up. I like how you added Jack's perspective of the issue. Was his question intentional? I'd like to think that it wasn't.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review. Without this sounding like defense of my work, I?m interested in what adjustments or edits are necessary. The rating guidelines set forth how to rate, and a subjective rating really isn?t appropriate if the writing requires no revisions. Please let me know. Also you may want to consult the review guidelines. Thank you.
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No it's cool I understand. I did review the guidelines before I commented. They do state "First, decide the number of stars to reward a work and select it." As I did. Then it states to explain what you liked. As I did. Since there was nothing I could think of that needed improvement I didn't suggestion anything.
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Thanks for your reply, however, you read the instructions and missed the rating guidelines. Here they are for your reference:
6- Exceptional
5- Excellent, enjoyable, no revisions necessary.
4- Good, adjustments needed
3- Below average
2- Needs lots of work
1- Poor, major revisions required.
I hope this helps you to become a more fair reviewer.
Comment from LisaMay
This is great! I love Jake's sense of humour! And I agree with you about the dangers of failure to vaccinate against diseases, thereby bringing danger of reviving them back into our lives. Your story is topical and delivers its message.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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This is great! I love Jake's sense of humour! And I agree with you about the dangers of failure to vaccinate against diseases, thereby bringing danger of reviving them back into our lives. Your story is topical and delivers its message.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your message and review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
A political/civic short short piece. I like the double-meaning or double definition of "shots," and Jake seems a bit like a tease. On the two sentences:Jack recalled when vaccinations were taken willingly and childhood diseases declined.
I would put a comma after "willingly" there.
It was raining and the protest was dispersing. I would put a comma after "raining" as it is the same case as above with two independent sentences there, to avoid run-ons.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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A political/civic short short piece. I like the double-meaning or double definition of "shots," and Jake seems a bit like a tease. On the two sentences:Jack recalled when vaccinations were taken willingly and childhood diseases declined.
I would put a comma after "willingly" there.
It was raining and the protest was dispersing. I would put a comma after "raining" as it is the same case as above with two independent sentences there, to avoid run-ons.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and story.
-This is written well, and
I disagree with how you
got a four star rating unless
your words were off, which they are not.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You have chosen a timely
topic with good description
and quotes.
-Jake is someone who pays
attention to what is going on.
-You provide a good twist at the end-
maybe they will get both kinds!!
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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-Good image and story.
-This is written well, and
I disagree with how you
got a four star rating unless
your words were off, which they are not.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You have chosen a timely
topic with good description
and quotes.
-Jake is someone who pays
attention to what is going on.
-You provide a good twist at the end-
maybe they will get both kinds!!
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review
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You are welcome.
Comment from Emma 2
Sorry about my last re, view. I took my time to read all of it. And after reading it I realised that it is good. He was dripping wet and he asked, for a shot. Meaning because he was dripping wet. ð??? Your reader Emma..
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Sorry about my last re, view. I took my time to read all of it. And after reading it I realised that it is good. He was dripping wet and he asked, for a shot. Meaning because he was dripping wet. ð??? Your reader Emma..
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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How can 75 words get boring? LoL. Thanks for your review, and go back and read the review guidelines.
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I apologise for what I said. I can't change what I said. But I shouldn't said that. Sorry..
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You can fix the review if you find out you made a mistake.
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The joke is that these people were protesting vaccinations, also known as a medical shot from a needle. Jake asks if anyone wants a shot (of alcohol) but the pun is obvious.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Is hard to craft a story in 75 words, but I think you manage to create this story as a news flash. The language is plain and simple as the one used in a news announcement, I am pretty sure if you want to expand this story in a bigger piece will be a very interesting read. Good luck:)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Is hard to craft a story in 75 words, but I think you manage to create this story as a news flash. The language is plain and simple as the one used in a news announcement, I am pretty sure if you want to expand this story in a bigger piece will be a very interesting read. Good luck:)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review. A 4 star rating is used when edits and adjustments are needed. Do you have any other feedback? Thanks again.
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A flash is 100% of the story. No future expansion. It was not my intention to create a news flash
The ?plain language? allows for clear communication. I can inly include 75 words.
I?d like to direct you to the rating guidelines. Then provide feedback to me in necessary edits or revisions necessary.
Thank you.
