"Painted Visions"
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "The Taming of the Shrew?"A Collection of Heart Felt Poetry.
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
This is a wonderful 'looking forward' to seeing that special loved one again...enjoyed your loving appeal to Maggie... :) I would only ask if you meant "a Sweet Kiss butt"? .. :) :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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This is a wonderful 'looking forward' to seeing that special loved one again...enjoyed your loving appeal to Maggie... :) I would only ask if you meant "a Sweet Kiss butt"? .. :) :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Yvonne I always enjoy your pleasant reviews and have a wonderful and blessed weekend Dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Badger_29
I very much enjoyed this right, it was fluid expressive and had a nice slow and do rhyme to it. However, I believe it would be easier to read if you would put spaces between and put the rhyming words at the end and spaces between the stanzas. Also, at one point in time you said but but spelled it b u t t, that kind of threw me off. If I was to space this I would probably do it like so:
The Taming of the Shrew is not
such an easy thing to do; no sugar and spice
here cuz she
will not be nice,
and you will just disappear!
the night is still turning, my heart is burning
for you,
my little my little killer shrew
if only I knew
now exactly what to do without you
so I must
trust in the Lord
Perhaps some way and
I'll get a sweet kiss-
but when I pass close by,
all's I hear is a hiss!
but that's okay,
I can live with that possibly someday
but no matter how I try to resist,
I look at her picture
and then again
comes back that need to kisswell that's all I can say,
all I can do
Perhaps this goes back to World War II?
It is my wish that you can take this as constructive criticism and I wish you the best in your writing and endeavors.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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I very much enjoyed this right, it was fluid expressive and had a nice slow and do rhyme to it. However, I believe it would be easier to read if you would put spaces between and put the rhyming words at the end and spaces between the stanzas. Also, at one point in time you said but but spelled it b u t t, that kind of threw me off. If I was to space this I would probably do it like so:
The Taming of the Shrew is not
such an easy thing to do; no sugar and spice
here cuz she
will not be nice,
and you will just disappear!
the night is still turning, my heart is burning
for you,
my little my little killer shrew
if only I knew
now exactly what to do without you
so I must
trust in the Lord
Perhaps some way and
I'll get a sweet kiss-
but when I pass close by,
all's I hear is a hiss!
but that's okay,
I can live with that possibly someday
but no matter how I try to resist,
I look at her picture
and then again
comes back that need to kisswell that's all I can say,
all I can do
Perhaps this goes back to World War II?
It is my wish that you can take this as constructive criticism and I wish you the best in your writing and endeavors.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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thanks brother badger but when I was creating that I had already sent it out and edited it to Maggie on the side of course I didn't have time to re-edit it on fan story which I just did with additional notes of this basic criminal.
Rick
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is quite well done and a nice change of pace in terms of formatting for you. I found the paragraph style a bit easier to read and digest. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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This is quite well done and a nice change of pace in terms of formatting for you. I found the paragraph style a bit easier to read and digest. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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thanks Angel but I didn't have a chance to edit that so it was all running send this but it is edited now with additional notes because Maggie is a basic criminal.
Ricky
Comment from Darlene Franklin
If you've been trying to tame the shrew since WWII, then what a lifetime of love and commitment! I hope all the shrewish behavior is only a cover for a tender heart. And if I missed the mark completely, please forgive me and enlighten me.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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If you've been trying to tame the shrew since WWII, then what a lifetime of love and commitment! I hope all the shrewish behavior is only a cover for a tender heart. And if I missed the mark completely, please forgive me and enlighten me.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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thanks first off I sent that edited to her on Hangouts and then when I then posted on fence try to have a chance to didn't have a chance to edit it because she upset me cuz she's a basic criminal so reread it and you'll learn more thanks.
Ricky