Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

Hey, this is a neat piece of flash fiction which accomplishes the competition's remit without coming across as contrived. It well deserves it's first place. Congratulations :)

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019

Thank for the read, review and encouraging comments.

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

wow - that is some story, and told so well.
I can see why you're ahead in the contest.
That must have been frightening, but I love how cavalier the proprietor was! Great ending! good job.
pome lover

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019

Thank you much for your review and your encouraging words.

reply by pome lover on 31-Jul-2019

most welcome

Comment from shaffer40

Excellent

This is a nice story responding to the prompt, an interesting experience. I liked the description of the mountains making you feel as though trapped in a teacup. Good images in this story.

One thing: There should probably be some punctuation in this quote: "Can't be this is Arizona." Suggest: "Can't be. This is Arizona."

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019

Thanks for the suggestion; will edit

Comment from Emma 2

Good

Once again a good story, and you were able to use the words breakfast, rock, light and clock. And phone. Not much more to say, other than it was a good story. (From (Emma)

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019

OK, thanks.