Oh, good Grief -Version 1
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Oh, Good Grief V1 Part one"A complete look at grief and grief support.
4 total reviews
Comment from Earl Corp
You havve me curious, about what's coming next. You had some editing issues you need to clean up. Shouldn't it be tacked, not tackled? Were instead of where at the poisoning. You have a couple of spacing issues between paragraphs. Did you mean first instead of fist man.you need to reedit the bosses will mourn me paragraph.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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You havve me curious, about what's coming next. You had some editing issues you need to clean up. Shouldn't it be tacked, not tackled? Were instead of where at the poisoning. You have a couple of spacing issues between paragraphs. Did you mean first instead of fist man.you need to reedit the bosses will mourn me paragraph.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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I thank you taking the time out to review and to bring up some spelling issues that are corrected. The spacing issues are intentional as this is such a long work, I decided to put a break between the days so the reader could rest if they want to. Thank you very much for this review. -Mike
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I know you don't want to hear this, but it should really have been broken up as a post for each meeting rather than running all of it together. I found it hard to keep focused at times since you tend to add things that really aren't necessary to the telling of the story. For example, the whole 'cow gal' episode seems irrelevant and out of place to m and takes up a big chunk of space on the page. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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I know you don't want to hear this, but it should really have been broken up as a post for each meeting rather than running all of it together. I found it hard to keep focused at times since you tend to add things that really aren't necessary to the telling of the story. For example, the whole 'cow gal' episode seems irrelevant and out of place to m and takes up a big chunk of space on the page. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Hate to tell you, I don't have that type of money, and in my experience with a work such as this someone will always never be happy. A lot of what you bring up is damned if I do and damned if I don't and really they are all judgement calls. If I didn't bring up the symbolism and how it is derived, someone would have commented negatively because they couldn't understand it, or that fit in.
I've through these types of considerations, many times before. I enjoyed and appreciate this review and thank you for it. -Mike
Comment from Patty Palmer
I really enjoyed reading this. You kept it interesting with the bits of being comical. The piece is well written and it all made sense. You didn't go off the subject and rambling off into nowhere.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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I really enjoyed reading this. You kept it interesting with the bits of being comical. The piece is well written and it all made sense. You didn't go off the subject and rambling off into nowhere.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Wow! I really appreciate this review and thank you so much for it. I find that having a humorous outlook in hard circumstances is a skill and helped me through numerous difficult periods in life. That is something I did my best to try to convey to both the group, as well the readers of this.
Comment from Sandra Montanino
You need quotation marks at the beginning of My Very Own Christmas Carol. In the last paragraph, the word "other" should have an "s" and after the word "as" you need the word "a." I would change, "for my own head and consideration" to "for my own benefit." There is a program called autocrit.com A lot of my writer friends use it and it helps them smooth our their stories and grammar. You tell a powerful story. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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You need quotation marks at the beginning of My Very Own Christmas Carol. In the last paragraph, the word "other" should have an "s" and after the word "as" you need the word "a." I would change, "for my own head and consideration" to "for my own benefit." There is a program called autocrit.com A lot of my writer friends use it and it helps them smooth our their stories and grammar. You tell a powerful story. Keep it up!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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I made the suggested corrections. Micro soft correction suggestions are enough for me. The best day of my life was when I figured out how to shut off the auto-spell correct as it was causing a good amount of grief in my life and reviewing.
Sometimes they get too grammatically correct, that you lose the style you want to impart to things. I really am thankful for this review and really appreciate it.
