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Comment from kahpot
This sounds like someone didn't make their AA meeting, and can't reach the buoy, a wonderful though bit sad 5-7-5 poem, love the chosen artwork very appropriate****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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This sounds like someone didn't make their AA meeting, and can't reach the buoy, a wonderful though bit sad 5-7-5 poem, love the chosen artwork very appropriate****kahpot
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thank you, kahpot
Comment from nomi338
Careful you don't get too close. Viewing Paradise while imbibing can have dangerous consequences. Once could forget where they were and wander off or stand too close to a bubbling brook an fall in face first.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Careful you don't get too close. Viewing Paradise while imbibing can have dangerous consequences. Once could forget where they were and wander off or stand too close to a bubbling brook an fall in face first.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Long as it?s not a pool I just made myself.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, no, is the wife out of town? Or did she leave you to your own devices in a big playground you'd rather not tackle...? :) ;) Always do so enjoy your offerings of 5-7-5 and such...they make me THINK!! :) ;) Thanx for sharing, Sir Bill! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Oh, no, is the wife out of town? Or did she leave you to your own devices in a big playground you'd rather not tackle...? :) ;) Always do so enjoy your offerings of 5-7-5 and such...they make me THINK!! :) ;) Thanx for sharing, Sir Bill! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Just a reminder of the years of deployment and being alone.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. I hope your fruit sidecar includes a life preserver in that drink :). Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. I hope your fruit sidecar includes a life preserver in that drink :). Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks, MA, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Mark D. R.
Bill!
Another nice 5-7-5. It has meaning to consider. Methinks you really meant to make 'life guard' one word, but it can take on a completely different meaning if two.
An eye-catching illustration for sure!
Mark
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Bill!
Another nice 5-7-5. It has meaning to consider. Methinks you really meant to make 'life guard' one word, but it can take on a completely different meaning if two.
An eye-catching illustration for sure!
Mark
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Mark.It should have two meanings.
Comment from humpwhistle
Been there, done that. A Tequila Sunset.
You tell a little story here, Bill. Character, setting, conflict and resolution. Hard to beat that in 17 syllables.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Been there, done that. A Tequila Sunset.
You tell a little story here, Bill. Character, setting, conflict and resolution. Hard to beat that in 17 syllables.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Lee, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately alcohol is responsible for many fading away from paradise and into the abyss without their life guard! I have seen it happen on a night out! Poignant words here Bill, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Unfortunately alcohol is responsible for many fading away from paradise and into the abyss without their life guard! I have seen it happen on a night out! Poignant words here Bill, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Dolly, for giving this a look. Bill