Singing Bird
Out to enjoy the morning5 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This has happened to me so many times, I have totally lost count.
Your senryu poem well describes the consequence of being distracted while walking and admiring nature's beauty and music.
That artwork is gorgeous, you have blended your color scheme exceptionally well, white font was an excellent choice.
A great contest entry! Very best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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This has happened to me so many times, I have totally lost count.
Your senryu poem well describes the consequence of being distracted while walking and admiring nature's beauty and music.
That artwork is gorgeous, you have blended your color scheme exceptionally well, white font was an excellent choice.
A great contest entry! Very best wishes.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for your read, review and kind comments.
Comment from artisart4u
This is so funny and it happens.
It has a beautiful picture, font and humor. To me the first two lines endings rhyme, they should not be rhyming is that right? The last one sums them up. No matter what I like your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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This is so funny and it happens.
It has a beautiful picture, font and humor. To me the first two lines endings rhyme, they should not be rhyming is that right? The last one sums them up. No matter what I like your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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I think you would be correct about rhyme if this was a regular haiku, however, I believe the requirement was only a 5-7-5 format. At least, I hope I am correct about that. Anyway, much appreciative of your rating.
Comment from Six-Star Writer
A tad humorous, but not the best poem in the contest. The moral of this story is to watch where you're going. I see so many people who don't have a clue where they are, or what's in front of them.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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A tad humorous, but not the best poem in the contest. The moral of this story is to watch where you're going. I see so many people who don't have a clue where they are, or what's in front of them.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from Gail Denham
As we grow "older", we try to watch the ground. It's a pity and disaster when we don't - I can just see your poem image - leaning back to watch the singing birds - and...well, it can sure wreck a warm summer morning.
Good poem for contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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As we grow "older", we try to watch the ground. It's a pity and disaster when we don't - I can just see your poem image - leaning back to watch the singing birds - and...well, it can sure wreck a warm summer morning.
Good poem for contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thanks much for your read and review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. You follow the rule of no rhyme and carry through with a theme clearly related to human nature (with a touch of physical nature for spice). Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. You follow the rule of no rhyme and carry through with a theme clearly related to human nature (with a touch of physical nature for spice). Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thanks much for your read and careful review.