Wilderness Redemption Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Evil Walks Part I"Shenanigans on the frontier
19 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
Sounds like the tricksters and the trickier tricksters will be meeting up soon and old debts will come up for payment. It's fun to imagine the guts it took to go this route in those days. McGraw and Smythe seemed destined for some memorable times by and by.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Sounds like the tricksters and the trickier tricksters will be meeting up soon and old debts will come up for payment. It's fun to imagine the guts it took to go this route in those days. McGraw and Smythe seemed destined for some memorable times by and by.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Thanks Bill I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
such big hanging pears (I have no idea what this means)
Your story is well written and interesting, my friend. There was a lot of evil on the early frontier for sure~Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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such big hanging pears (I have no idea what this means)
Your story is well written and interesting, my friend. There was a lot of evil on the early frontier for sure~Debbie
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Debbie the big hanging pears were addressed in chapter one, if youre interested. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from DonandVicki
Thank you for this newest chapter. I have enjoyed reading and reviewing your well composed story so far. I am looking forward to more. You have a knack for stopping the story keeping the reader in suspense.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you for this newest chapter. I have enjoyed reading and reviewing your well composed story so far. I am looking forward to more. You have a knack for stopping the story keeping the reader in suspense.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. I hadnt thought of the suspense angle until I started writing it. I appreciate you keeping with the story.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
This is well-written and engaging, though I must confess I don't remember all the details of previous chapters (I'll have to brush up later when I have more time). I strongly suspect that Swooping Eagle, like all who betray and seek revenge, is going to sorely regret his actions.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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This is well-written and engaging, though I must confess I don't remember all the details of previous chapters (I'll have to brush up later when I have more time). I strongly suspect that Swooping Eagle, like all who betray and seek revenge, is going to sorely regret his actions.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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You never know if he'll regret his actions. I know somebody will, karma will run wild. I appreciate you keeping with the story.
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You're welcome, Earl.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This was an enjoyable read and moved along at a good pace which kept me both focused and engaged. The first part was like watching 'Dances with Wolves', but fortunately morphed into a more novel experience from then on. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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This was an enjoyable read and moved along at a good pace which kept me both focused and engaged. The first part was like watching 'Dances with Wolves', but fortunately morphed into a more novel experience from then on. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. Could you clarify the Dances with Wolves analogy? I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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?Dances with Wolves? is a rather well known movie. The main character mirrors your description of the man in the first few paragraphs right down to the beaver trapping and clothing. The main character in the movie also marries an Indian gal with a name very close to the one you use and has some of the same personality traits. It was way too de ja vu.
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Are you sure you weren't thinking about Jeremiah Johnson? I didn't base this on a movie character, any similarity between my characters and a movie was coincidental.
Comment from Loren .
Long time since I read a story from an omnipotent point of view. Not always an easy task getting into the personality of so many characters and still making it feel authentic. Good job. Loren
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Long time since I read a story from an omnipotent point of view. Not always an easy task getting into the personality of so many characters and still making it feel authentic. Good job. Loren
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. I do have other chapters and I'd be honored if you'd check them out, for the authenticity. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Smyth is a fool to believe the Shawnee will allow him to run a trading post. Swooping Eagle gave his word he could build the trading post but that doesn't mean he can run it. The Indian plans to get rid of it and Smyth after the fact. LOL. He made the deal so his people would have guns and level the fighting field for them. Foxy ole Indian. Well done Earl. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Smyth is a fool to believe the Shawnee will allow him to run a trading post. Swooping Eagle gave his word he could build the trading post but that doesn't mean he can run it. The Indian plans to get rid of it and Smyth after the fact. LOL. He made the deal so his people would have guns and level the fighting field for them. Foxy ole Indian. Well done Earl. Nancy:)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you Nancy. It's kind of cool thinking exactly how this will unfold. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from aryr
A good chapter indeed. I enjoyed the way you jumped to three different scenes. They were all important and they definitely broke any potential boredom, it was a great touch. I really enjoy the story thus far. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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A good chapter indeed. I enjoyed the way you jumped to three different scenes. They were all important and they definitely broke any potential boredom, it was a great touch. I really enjoy the story thus far. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you, i like the jumping style it helps me to develope each character. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are so welcome and doing a great job
Comment from robyn corum
Earl,
Nice. I think it always adds a great deal of intrigue when each character has their own plans - regardless of what the others are up to. Leaves the reader wondering who will come out on top. *smile*
Notes:
1.) "You would have the white who killed my brother and two of our friends walk free among us?" (no qmarks here) At the very least he should be made a slave for the women, not treated as a warrior."
2.) "I still think it would be a shame that a man with such big hanging pears live as a slave, and I don't think he will(.)"
Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Earl,
Nice. I think it always adds a great deal of intrigue when each character has their own plans - regardless of what the others are up to. Leaves the reader wondering who will come out on top. *smile*
Notes:
1.) "You would have the white who killed my brother and two of our friends walk free among us?" (no qmarks here) At the very least he should be made a slave for the women, not treated as a warrior."
2.) "I still think it would be a shame that a man with such big hanging pears live as a slave, and I don't think he will(.)"
Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the punctuation catches Robyn. Thats the cool thing about Fanstory, no matter how many times I lookat it it always helps to have a different set of eyes find things that need fixed.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Earl Corp,
In the light of Author's Notes, this piece is really worth reading, and as the story is moving forward, next chapters are bound to be worth enjoying.
I'm looking ahead!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Hello Earl Corp,
In the light of Author's Notes, this piece is really worth reading, and as the story is moving forward, next chapters are bound to be worth enjoying.
I'm looking ahead!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. I hope you would find it worth looking back also, the first chapters are some of my best work. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Earl Corp, Most Welcome!
Of course! I'll follow your laudable suggestions.
With best wishes,
~ RP
